Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly with the correct pronoun and a complete, natural sentence. Since a bike is an object, use “it,” not “him.” You could also add one brief detail, such as when you used it or where you rode it.

Exemplo: Yes, I had one when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood after school.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence first, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Then organize your explanation with a linking word such as “because” or “for example.” Correct the pronouns and grammar: use “them” for bikes, “riding them,” “bikes are part of their childhood,” and “make so many memories.” Avoid repetition and long, unclear sentences by separating your ideas into two or three sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. For example, I often see kids riding them in parks and gardens. I think cycling is a memorable part of childhood because it allows children to have fun and become more independent.

× Yes, I had him.

✓ Yes, I had one.

The pronoun him refers to a male person or animal, so it cannot refer to a bike. Use one to refer back to a singular countable noun such as bike.

× Bikes are pretty much popular in my country because I see many kids using it when they are in the garden, in the park and when I look at them it just generally makes me happy that their bike is their childhood, part of their childhood because you genuinely make so much memories.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because I see many kids using them in gardens and parks. When I look at them, it makes me happy because bikes are an important part of their childhood.

Pretty much popular is unnatural in this context. Use very popular or quite popular to describe a high level of popularity. Also, generally and genuinely are unnecessary here and make the sentence less clear.

× Bikes are pretty much popular in my country because I see many kids using it when they are in the garden, in the park and when I look at them it just generally makes me happy that their bike is their childhood, part of their childhood because you genuinely make so much memories.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because I see many kids using them in gardens and parks. When I look at them, it makes me happy because bikes are an important part of their childhood.

The plural noun bikes must be replaced by the plural pronoun them, not the singular pronoun it. In addition, the phrase when I look at them needs a comma before the main clause to make the sentence easier to understand.

× Bikes are pretty much popular in my country because I see many kids using it when they are in the garden, in the park and when I look at them it just generally makes me happy that their bike is their childhood, part of their childhood because you genuinely make so much memories.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because I see many kids using them in gardens and parks. When I look at them, it makes me happy because bikes are an important part of their childhood.

The original sentence contains too many ideas joined together without clear sentence boundaries. Separate the ideas into two sentences and use because to show the reason for your opinion. The expression their bike is their childhood is also structurally unclear; say bikes are an important part of their childhood instead.

× Bikes are pretty much popular in my country because I see many kids using it when they are in the garden, in the park and when I look at them it just generally makes me happy that their bike is their childhood, part of their childhood because you genuinely make so much memories.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because I see many kids using them in gardens and parks. When I look at them, it makes me happy because they make so many memories with their bikes.

Memories is a plural countable noun, so it must be used with many, not much. Much is used with uncountable nouns, while many is used with plural countable nouns: many memories.