Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm và có thêm chi tiết về việc đi xe đạp đến trường, nhưng câu quá dài và thiếu dấu hiệu liên kết rõ ràng. Cụm “bought for me a bicycle” nên đổi thành “bought me a bicycle”, “drive my bike” nên dùng “ride my bike”, và “the feeling of proud” nên sửa thành “a feeling of pride”. Ngoài ra, vì đang kể về quá khứ, “I can’t” nên đổi thành “I could” hoặc diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn là “when I was able to ride it independently”. Hãy chia câu thành 2–3 câu, bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời trực tiếp rồi thêm cảm xúc hoặc kết quả.

Exemplo: Yes, my parents bought me a bicycle when I was a child. I rode it to school every day, and I felt a great sense of pride when I was finally able to ride it independently. It was one of my happiest childhood memories.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng cấu trúc “I think they don’t” chưa tự nhiên; nên nói “I don’t think they are very popular”. Cụm “rated down bicycles” không đúng ngữ cảnh và có thể thay bằng “rather than bicycles” hoặc “instead of bicycles”. Vì “bikes” là danh từ số nhiều, dùng “they help people save time”, không dùng “it helps them save times”; “time” không đếm được. Bạn nên thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về giao thông hoặc sự tiện lợi để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn, đồng thời dùng từ nối như “because” hoặc “whereas”.

Exemplo: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in Vietnam, especially in big cities. Most people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting in heavy traffic. However, bicycles are becoming more common among people who exercise or want to protect the environment.

× Yes, of course when I was a child my parents bought for me a bicycle so I rode it to school every day I remember the feelings of the feeling of proud when I can't drive my bike independently without my parents.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, my parents bought me a bicycle, so I rode it to school every day. I remember feeling proud when I could ride my bike independently without my parents.

The original answer contains several independent clauses joined without proper punctuation or conjunctions. Separating the ideas into complete sentences makes the structure clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, of course when I was a child my parents bought for me a bicycle so I rode it to school every day I remember the feelings of the feeling of proud when I can't drive my bike independently without my parents.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, my parents bought me a bicycle, so I rode it to school every day. I remember feeling proud when I could ride my bike independently without my parents.

Proud is an adjective, so it cannot be used as a noun in the phrase the feeling of proud. Use the adjective after the verb feeling: feeling proud. You can also use the noun pride, as in I remember feeling a sense of pride.

× Yes, of course when I was a child my parents bought for me a bicycle so I rode it to school every day I remember the feelings of the feeling of proud when I can't drive my bike independently without my parents.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, my parents bought me a bicycle, so I rode it to school every day. I remember feeling proud when I could ride my bike independently without my parents.

The modal verb can refers to present ability, but the answer describes a past experience. Use could to express ability in the past.

× Yes, of course when I was a child my parents bought for me a bicycle so I rode it to school every day I remember the feelings of the feeling of proud when I can't drive my bike independently without my parents.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, my parents bought me a bicycle, so I rode it to school every day. I remember feeling proud when I could ride my bike independently without my parents.

The time expression when I was a child places the event in the past. Therefore, the present form can't should be changed to the past form could. Keep the verb forms consistent when describing past events.

× I think they don't because Vietnamese people prefer motorbikes and cars rated down bicycles because it helps them save times and commute quickly.

✓ I don't think so