Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly and use more natural phrasing. Instead of “in my childhood” and “orange in color,” say “when I was a child” and “it was orange.” You could also add one specific detail, such as how often you used it or where you rode it.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was orange, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school. I have some great memories of riding it with my friends.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence first and avoid repetition and unclear phrases such as “habits, habits” and “every kid in his childhood.” Use “many children have their own bikes” instead. Add a specific reason, such as affordability, exercise, or convenient transportation, and use a linking word like “because” or “also.”

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. Many children have their own bikes because they are affordable and convenient for getting around their neighborhoods. In recent years, more adults have also started cycling for exercise and environmental reasons.

× Yeah, it's kind of popular in our country as every kid in his childhood habits, habits, our own bike here, and it's quite popular.

✓ Yeah, bikes are kind of popular in our country because every child has their own bike.

The pronoun 'it' refers to a singular object, but 'bikes' is plural. Use 'bikes are' instead of 'it's.' Also, 'his' is unnecessarily gender-specific when referring to children in general; 'their' is more inclusive. Practice matching pronouns with their nouns in number and use 'they/their' for people in general when gender is unknown.

× Yeah, it's kind of popular in our country as every kid in his childhood habits, habits, our own bike here, and it's quite popular.

✓ Yeah, bikes are kind of popular in our country because every child has their own bike.

The subject 'every child' is singular, so the verb must be 'has,' not 'have' or the incorrect form 'habits.' Remember to add -s to the verb when using a singular third-person subject in the present tense: 'Every child has.'

× Yeah, it's kind of popular in our country as every kid in his childhood habits, habits, our own bike here, and it's quite popular.

✓ Yeah, bikes are kind of popular in our country because every child has their own bike.

The original sentence contains repeated words and does not form a clear grammatical structure. The phrase 'every kid in his childhood habits, habits, our own bike here' is incomplete and unclear. Use a complete clause with a subject and verb, such as 'every child has their own bike,' and connect the ideas with 'because.'