Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答切题，也提供了原因和个人感受，内容比较完整。但有几处明显的语法和搭配错误：应将“when I were”改为“when I was”，“force my father get me one”改为“force my father to get me one”，并将“our family's financial problems”表达得更自然，例如“my family was experiencing financial difficulties”。另外，“I can’t force...”使用现在时不符合过去语境，应改为“I couldn’t ask/force...”。建议使用“Unfortunately, ... because ... . I really wanted one, but ...”这样的清晰结构，并控制句子长度，使表达更自然。

Exemplo: Unfortunately, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family was experiencing financial difficulties. I really wanted one, but I couldn’t ask my father to buy me one because I knew money was tight at that time.

Sugestão: 回答有过去和现在的对比，但没有先直接回答问题，而且语法、逻辑和搭配问题较多。“When I were”应改为“When I was”；“every family has”在过去语境中应改为“every family had”；“in there”应删除；“popular than”应改为“more popular than”；“everyone can afford”缺少宾语，且“because everyone can afford [a car]”与现实含义不够合理。建议先明确表态，例如“Bikes are still fairly popular, especially among students”，然后说明不同人群或地区的情况，并使用“however”“especially”等连接词。不要笼统地说“everyone”，可以用“many people”提高准确性。

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are still fairly popular in my country, especially among students and people who live in crowded cities. However, cars are generally more popular nowadays because they are more comfortable and convenient for long-distance travel. In the past, bikes were more common because they were cheaper and technology was less developed.

× Unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I were a child because of our family's financial problems.

✓ Unfortunately, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because of my family's financial problems.

“When I were a child”描述的是过去的经历，主语是“I”，所以be动词过去式应使用“was”，不能使用“were”。

× That was actually something I dreamed of, but I can't force my father get me one because I know that was a hard time for us.

✓ That was actually something I dreamed of, but I can't force my father to get me one because I know that was a hard time for us.

“force”后面需要使用“宾语 + to do”结构，因此应说“force my father to get me one”，不能说“force my father get me one”。

× That was actually something I dreamed of, but I can't force my father to get me one because I know that was a hard time for us.

✓ That was actually something I dreamed of, but I couldn't force my father to get me one because I knew that was a hard time for us.

整段是在回忆童年时期的情况，因此“can”和“know”也应使用过去式，分别改为“could”和“knew”，以保持时态一致。

× When I were a child, you know, every family has their own financial problems in there the technology is not quite developed, so everyone wants a bike.

✓ When I was a child, you know, every family had its own financial problems, and the technology was not quite developed, so everyone wanted a bike.

这句话讲的是过去的童年时期，所以“were”应改为“was”，“has”应改为“had”，“is”应改为“was”，“wants”应改为“wanted”。另外，“every family”是单数，后面的物主代词应使用单数形式“its”。

× When I were a child, you know, every family has their own financial problems in there the technology is not quite developed, so everyone wants a bike.

✓ When I was a child, you know, every family had its own financial problems, and the technology was not quite developed, so everyone wanted a bike.

“in there”不能用来连接“financial problems”和“the technology”。这里需要使用并列连词“and”，表示“而且，此外”。

× But nowadays having a car is actually popular than that having a bike because everyone can afford right now.

✓ But nowadays, having a car is actually more popular than having a bike because everyone can afford one right now.

“popular”是多音节形容词，比较级应使用“more popular”，不能直接在后面加“than”。比较对象也应保持平行，使用“having a car”和“having a bike”。