Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and has a clear contrast using “However,” but it contains several grammar and word-choice problems. Replace “couldn't afford A1” with “couldn't afford one,” and say “lent me a bicycle” rather than “lent me uh bicycle.” Use “so that I could ride with them” instead of “so that I can enjoy with them,” and change “They are very kind” to the past tense “They were very kind.” Try to answer fluently without repeated fillers such as “uh.”

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn’t afford one. However, a close friend lent me a bicycle, so I could ride around the neighborhood with him. I really appreciated his kindness, and I enjoyed cycling whenever I visited him.

Sugestão: You give a reason for your opinion, but the answer is difficult to understand because of repetition, inaccurate expressions, and unclear vocabulary. Say “Bikes are very popular” rather than “the bikes are very much popular,” and replace “hilly hills” with “hilly” or “mountainous.” Explain the road conditions clearly, for example, “Many roads are narrow and difficult to access by car.” Organize the response with a topic sentence followed by one or two specific reasons, and avoid repeating “my country” and using fillers such as “uh.”

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in rural and mountainous areas. Many roads are narrow and winding, so bicycles can be more convenient than cars for short journeys. They are also affordable and environmentally friendly, which makes them a practical form of transport.

× my friend uh uh, lent me uh bicycle

✓ My friend lent me a bicycle

The singular countable noun bicycle needs the indefinite article a when it is mentioned for the first time.

× so that I can enjoy with them

✓ so that I could enjoy riding with them

The main event happened in the past, so the verb in the purpose clause should also be in the past form could. After enjoy, use a gerund such as riding.

× enjoy with them

✓ enjoy riding with them

The verb enjoy is followed by a noun or a gerund, not used alone in this structure. The phrase enjoy riding with them is grammatically complete.

× They are very kind to me.

✓ My friend was very kind to me.

The sentence refers to one friend, so the singular noun phrase My friend is clearer than the plural pronoun They. Because the story is about the past, was is also appropriate.

× the bikes are very popular in my country

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country

When talking about bikes in general, do not use the definite article the. Use the plural noun Bikes without an article.

× because my country, uh, is a country of hilly hills and the mountains and the Italy accessible Rd. are not there, so roads are also smalls

✓ because my country is hilly and has mountains, and its roads are not easily accessible, so the roads are also small

The original sentence has an unclear and overly complicated conjunction structure. Use and to connect related ideas clearly, and avoid combining because and so in the same cause-and-effect structure unless the sentence is carefully organized.

× the Italy accessible Rd.

✓ the roads are not easily accessible

The adjective accessible should be modified by the adverb easily. Also, the natural adjective order is easily accessible roads, not Italy accessible Rd.

× roads are also smalls

✓ the roads are also small

Small is an adjective and does not take a plural ending after the linking verb are. The plural meaning is already shown by the noun roads.