Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer the question directly in the first sentence, then add two or three specific details. Avoid repeating ideas such as “every single day” and “used to cycle,” and use shorter sentences to make your response more natural. Correct “since I was to live in a gator society” to “because I lived in a gated community.” Also, use a clear linking word such as “As a result” to connect the community with your cycling routine.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a pink bicycle with a black basket and a rear seat. I often rode it around the large gated community where I lived with my friends. We usually went cycling together after school, so I used my bike almost every day.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence and organize the supporting examples logically. Avoid repeating “students,” “college,” and “used,” and make sure the subject and verb agree: say “Bikes are mainly used,” not “It is mainly used.” Use precise expressions such as “students who live far from campus” and “delivery workers,” and connect the examples with “In addition” or “For example.”

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students. Many students ride them to college, including those who live far from campus. In addition, delivery workers, such as newspaper vendors and milkmen, often use bikes because they are convenient and inexpensive.

× I still live in an apartment.

✓ I used to live in an apartment.

The question asks about your childhood, so the past form is needed. Use 'used to live' to describe a past situation that was true regularly or over a period of time but is no longer true.

× Since I was to live in a gator society and it was very large, we used to cycle so much every single day.

✓ Because I used to live in a gated society, and it was very large, we used to cycle there every single day.

'Was to live' is not the correct form for a past living situation. Use 'used to live.' Also, 'gator' should be 'gated' in this context. Use 'because' to clearly introduce the reason.

× It is mainly used by students to commute to college daily.

✓ Bikes are mainly used by students to commute to college every day.

The subject 'bikes' is plural, so it must be followed by the plural verb 'are,' not 'is.' The phrase 'every day' is also the natural expression for describing a daily activity.

× It is mainly used by students to commute to college daily and people students inside the college and even students who live a bit far away they use bikes to go to the college.

✓ Bikes are mainly used by students to commute to college every day, including students who live on campus and those who live a bit farther away.

The original sentence contains an unclear and repetitive structure, especially 'people students inside the college' and 'students ... they.' Use a clear list with 'including' and avoid repeating the subject with an unnecessary pronoun.

× And also used by newspaper delivery people to deliver newspapers and milkmen to deliver milk.

✓ They are also used by newspaper delivery people to deliver newspapers and by milkmen to deliver milk.

The original clause is missing the auxiliary verb 'are,' so it is incomplete. In the passive structure, use 'are used.' Adding 'by' before 'milkmen' makes the two groups parallel and clear.