Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 시제와 문장 구조를 수정해야 합니다. 과거의 경험이므로 “have”와 “take” 대신 “had”와 “rode”를 사용하세요. 또한 “bought me in my birthday”는 부자연스러우므로 “bought me a bike for my birthday”라고 말해야 합니다. 답변의 마지막에 있는 “Take it”은 의미가 불분명하므로 삭제하고, 답변을 주제문-이유-구체적인 활동의 순서로 2~3개의 문장으로 정리하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought me one for my birthday, and I used to ride it once a week. I often rode it around my neighborhood and played with my friends.

Sugestão: 단수와 복수 형태를 정확히 사용해야 합니다. 일반적으로 자전거를 말할 때는 “bikes are popular”라고 하고, “taking a bike”보다는 “riding bikes”가 자연스럽습니다. “when they are outgoing”은 의미가 모호하므로 “when people go outdoors” 또는 “for commuting and exercise”처럼 구체적으로 표현하세요. 또한 “a lot of bike Rd”는 불명확하므로 “many bicycle paths”라고 바꾸고, because를 사용해 인기를 얻은 이유를 논리적으로 연결하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Korea, especially among young people. Many people ride them for exercise or to commute, because Korean cities have many bicycle paths along rivers and in parks. However, public transportation is still more common for daily travel.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Because the sentence refers to a finished period in the past, use the past-tense form had instead of the present-tense form have.

× My mother bought me in my birthday.

✓ My mother bought me a bike on my birthday.

Use on with a specific day or date, such as on my birthday. Also, the verb buy should be followed by the person and the thing bought: bought me a bike.

× I take a bike once a week.

✓ I rode a bike once a week.

The answer describes a repeated activity during childhood, so use the past tense rode rather than the present-tense form take. Rode is also the more natural verb for using a bike.

× I play with my friends.

✓ I played with my friends.

Since the speaker is talking about childhood, use the past-tense form played.

× Yes, I think bike is popular in Korea.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in Korea.

The sentence refers to bikes in general, so use the plural noun bikes. The plural subject also requires the plural verb are.

× In Korea they are taking a bike when they are outgoing.

✓ In Korea, people ride bikes when they go out.

For a general fact or usual activity, use the simple present, ride and go, rather than the present continuous, are taking. The expression go out is more natural than are outgoing in this context.

× They have a lot of bike Rd.

✓ There are a lot of bike paths in Korea.

Use there are to introduce the existence of plural things. Use the plural noun paths because there is more than one path. Bike paths is also the natural expression for roads intended for bicycles.