Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly and use correct, natural grammar. Say “I had a blue-and-red bike,” rather than “blue and red color biked,” and avoid repeating “I used to.” Use “every afternoon” instead of “our everyday afternoon,” and connect your supporting detail with “After school.” End with a clear statement about why you enjoyed cycling. Try to keep the answer to two or three fluent sentences and remove fillers such as “umm” and “yes.”

Exemplo: Yes, I had a blue-and-red bike when I was a child. I used to ride it every afternoon after school, usually around my neighborhood. I really enjoyed it because it gave me a sense of freedom.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with two logically connected reasons. Use natural expressions such as “bicycles are used for daily commuting” and “cycling is good for people’s health,” instead of “the usage of bicycle” and “cycling is a good for health.” Add a specific example, such as students commuting by bike or people cycling in parks. Avoid the unnecessary closing phrase “I would like to inform you about that,” and use linking words such as “In addition” or “As a result” more effectively.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for short journeys. Many people use them for daily commuting because they are affordable and environmentally friendly. In addition, cycling is good for people’s health, so you can often see people riding in parks or on dedicated cycle paths.

× Yes, I vividly remember I had blue and red color biked.

✓ Yes, I vividly remember that I had a blue-and-red bicycle.

The singular noun bicycle should be used with the singular article a. The original phrase biked is not the correct noun form, and blue-and-red describes one bicycle with two colors.

× Yes, I vividly remember I had blue and red color biked.

✓ Yes, I vividly remember that I had a blue-and-red bicycle.

A singular countable noun such as bicycle needs an article. Use a before bicycle because the bicycle is being mentioned for the first time.

× I used to I used to do cycling our everyday afternoon after umm I was done with my schooling.

✓ I used to cycle every afternoon after I was done with school.

The phrase I used to is repeated, which makes the sentence structurally incorrect. Remove the repetition and arrange the time expression in a clear order.

× I used to I used to do cycling our everyday afternoon after umm I was done with my schooling.

✓ I used to cycle every afternoon after I was done with school.

Used to must be followed by the base form of a verb, not do cycling. Therefore, use used to cycle.

× I used to I used to do cycling our everyday afternoon after umm I was done with my schooling.

✓ I used to cycle every afternoon after I was done with school.

Our is a possessive pronoun for a plural possessor, but it does not fit this sentence. The intended meaning is every afternoon, so our should be removed.

× I used to enjoy that a lot I.

✓ I used to enjoy that a lot.

The final I is an unnecessary subject fragment. A complete sentence should end after the adverbial phrase a lot.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because of the usage of bicycle for daily commute.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because bicycles are used for daily commuting.

The sentence refers to bicycles in general, so the plural noun bicycles is more appropriate than the singular bicycle. Daily commuting is also the correct noun phrase for regular travel.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because of the usage of bicycle for daily commute.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because bicycles are used for daily commuting.

The definite article the is not needed before a plural noun used in a general sense. Therefore, use bicycles rather than the bicycle.

× As well As for the health like cycling is a good for health.

✓ Cycling is also good for your health.

The original sentence combines as well as, as for, and like in an unclear way. Use also to connect this reason clearly to the previous idea.

× As well As for the health like cycling is a good for health.

✓ Cycling is also good for your health.

Good is an adjective and does not need the article a in this sentence. The phrase a good for health is incorrect; use is good for your health.

× So people usually do cycling outside not in the gym.

✓ Therefore, people usually cycle outdoors rather than in the gym.

The natural verb is cycle, not do cycling. After the subject people, use the base verb cycle to describe a general habit.

× So people usually do cycling outside not in the gym.

✓ Therefore, people usually cycle outdoors rather than in the gym.

Rather than is needed to clearly contrast cycling outdoors with cycling in the gym. It creates a complete comparison between the two locations.