Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly at the beginning instead of starting with “Apparently,” which sounds uncertain. Avoid repetition, such as “gifted it gifted it,” and use accurate past-tense grammar: “gave it to me,” “were,” “didn’t know,” and “taught me.” Organize the answer with linking words such as “because” and “although,” and use natural vocabulary like “red bike” rather than “red in color.” Finish with a specific result, such as being able to ride confidently.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a red bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my seventh birthday because all my friends had one, so I was extremely excited. However, I didn’t know how to ride it at first, so my father taught me. After a few weeks of practice, I became quite confident.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence and avoid the unnatural phrase “India is getting civilized,” which may sound inappropriate; use “India is becoming more developed” or explain that bicycles remain common in some areas. Correct the repetition in “mode of mode of transportation” and “more more.” Distinguish clearly between bicycles and motorbikes, since the question uses “bikes” ambiguously. Add a specific comparison between cities and rural areas, and use linking words to make the contrast clearer.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in India, although their popularity varies from place to place. In rural areas and smaller towns, many people still use bicycles because they are affordable and convenient. Motorbikes are especially common among young adults because they are faster than bicycles and do not require much fuel. However, bicycles are also becoming popular in large cities as people look for cheaper and more environmentally friendly transport.

× My father gifted it gifted it on my 7th birthday as all of my friends having a bike and I was really excited when I saw it and I don't know how to ride at that moment.

✓ My father gave it to me on my seventh birthday because all of my friends had bikes, and I was really excited when I saw it, although I did not know how to ride it at that time.

The answer describes a past event, so the verbs should be in the past tense. Having should be changed to had, and do not know should be changed to did not know. The repeated phrase gifted it was also removed to make the sentence grammatically complete.

× My father gifted it gifted it on my 7th birthday as all of my friends having a bike and I was really excited when I saw it and I don't know how to ride at that moment.

✓ My father gave it to me on my seventh birthday because all of my friends had bikes, and I was really excited when I saw it, although I did not know how to ride it at that time.

All of my friends refers to more than one person, so the noun should be plural: bikes, not a bike. Using the plural form makes the meaning and agreement clear.

× However my father teach me and I'm get pro in that.

✓ However, my father taught me, and I became good at riding it.

The answer refers to events in the past. Therefore, teach must become taught, and I am get must be replaced with the correct past-tense expression became good.

× Certainly because India is getting civilized still, there are certain areas in India where people still use cycles or bikes as a transportation mode of mode of transportation.

✓ Certainly, because India is still developing, there are certain areas where people still use cycles or bikes as a mode of transportation.

The phrase mode of is repeated, which makes the sentence structure incorrect. The sentence also contains an unnecessary repetition of in India. Removing these repetitions produces a clear and grammatically complete sentence.

× However, they are more more common in the younger age groups because it's easy and they don't need any license while driving.

✓ However, bikes are more common among younger people because riding them is easy, and people do not need a license to ride them.

The pronoun they could incorrectly refer to bikes in the phrase they do not need a license, even though people are the ones who need a license. Repeating the noun people and using them for the bikes makes the references clear. The repeated word more was also removed.