Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, I had a bike.” Avoid the unnatural phrase “This I used to have” and use “as transportation” or “to get to school” instead of “as a transport.” Also, connect the ideas with a linking word and add one specific detail about the bike or your experience. Keep the answer concise and grammatically accurate.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I usually rode it to school because it was convenient and saved my parents from having to drive me. It was a small blue bike that I used almost every day.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly and use accurate vocabulary: “Bicycles are a common form of transportation” rather than “Huai is a basic transport.” The second sentence is unclear, so explain when and why people use bikes, for example, during rush hour or in crowded city centers. Use linking words such as “especially,” “because,” and “as a result,” and support your opinion with a specific example.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and young adults. Many people ride them during rush hour because the roads are crowded and buses and cars can be slow. In addition, bicycles are inexpensive and convenient for short journeys.

× This I used to have a bike when I was a little kid, I used it as a transport when I went to school.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a little kid, and I used it as a means of transport when I went to school.

The sentence begins with This, which does not function correctly as the subject here. The original also joins two independent clauses with only a comma. Use I as the subject and add and to connect the two clauses. The phrase a means of transport is the standard expression.

× Yes, I think Huai is a basic transport in our country and it's popular for all young adults.

✓ Yes, I think Huai is a basic means of transport in our country, and it is popular among young adults.

Transport is generally used as an uncountable noun in this meaning, so a transport is not appropriate. Use a means of transport instead. Also, popular among is the natural prepositional phrase when referring to a group of people.

× It is most used during the because it is limited and debus and cars are limited during the day.

✓ It is used most during the day because buses and cars are limited at that time.

The phrase during the is incomplete because it is missing a noun. The original sentence also contains an unclear and grammatically incomplete sequence before and buses and cars. Use a complete time expression, such as during the day, and connect the reason clause clearly with because.