Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Give a more direct and natural description of the bike. “Red colored” should be “red,” and “a gold Evan” is unclear, so explain the brand or remove it. Also, avoid unnecessary fillers such as “and yeah,” and use a linking word such as “Moreover” or “We also shared it.” Keep the answer to three or four clear sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. It was a red bicycle made by a brand called Gold Evan, and it was very comfortable to ride. I shared it with my brother, so we often rode it around our neighborhood. It was a memorable part of our childhood.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly first, then explain the regional difference with accurate and consistent vocabulary. Replace “Tara,” “Torah,” and “Thorai” with “the Terai,” and say “Nepal has the Terai, Hill, and Himalayan regions” rather than “is divided into 3 regions that is.” Use “flat roads” instead of “smooth Rd.” and avoid repeating “So”; connect ideas with “because” or “as a result.”

Exemplo: Yes, bicycles and motorbikes are quite popular in Nepal, especially in the Terai region. This area is mostly flat and has relatively smooth roads, so cycling is easier there than in the hilly and mountainous parts of the country. As a result, many people use bikes for commuting and short trips.

× It was a red colored bike with a branding, a gold Evan, and it was a very smooth bike.

✓ It was a red-colored bike with branding, a gold Evan, and it was a very smooth bike.

Branding is generally used as an uncountable noun when referring to the design or brand information on a product, so it does not normally take the article a. The expression red-colored should also be hyphenated when it comes before a noun.

× So Nepal is divided into 3 regions that is Torah, Himal and Hilly region.

✓ So Nepal is divided into three regions: the Torah, Himal, and Hilly regions.

The noun regions is plural, and the names in the list refer to three regions. Therefore, region should be pluralized as regions when referring to all three areas. Using three instead of the numeral 3 is also more natural in a speaking response.

× So Nepal is divided into 3 regions that is Torah, Himal and Hilly region.

✓ So Nepal is divided into three regions: the Torah, Himal, and Hilly regions.

The subject regions is plural, so the singular verb is cannot be used with it. The original phrase that is should be replaced with a structure that agrees with the plural subject.

× The Thorai region being very plain and have a smooth Rd.

✓ The Thorai region is very plain and has smooth roads.

The original sentence is a fragment because being does not function as the main finite verb. Use is to form a complete sentence. A complete sentence needs a subject and a properly conjugated main verb.

× The Thorai region being very plain and have a smooth Rd.

✓ The Thorai region is very plain and has smooth roads.

The subject region is singular, so the verb must be has, not have. The verb is is also needed after the subject to complete the first clause.

× The Thorai region being very plain and have a smooth Rd.

✓ The Thorai region is very plain and has smooth roads.

When referring generally to the roads in a whole region, the plural noun roads is more appropriate than the singular phrase a smooth road. The plural form gives the sentence the intended general meaning.