Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like "umm" and correct tense/word order (e.g., "that" → "that was").

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink because my mother bought it for my fifth birthday, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood. However, I don't know where it is now.

Sugestão: Make the response more fluent and precise. Give a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (e.g., "however", "because") to add specific reasons or a brief example. Avoid repetition and tighten phrasing.

Exemplo: I think bikes were much more popular in Thailand about fifteen years ago. However, nowadays most people prefer cars or public transport because they are more convenient for commuting, especially in cities with heavy traffic.

× 'Umm that why that bike was in a pink color that my mother bought it for me in my birthday when I was five years old.'

✓ 'Umm that is why the bike was pink; my mother bought it for me on my birthday when I was five years old.'

'the' is needed before 'bike' because we refer to a specific bike already mentioned; remove 'in a' before 'pink color' and use 'pink' as an adjective; use 'on my birthday' (correct preposition for days/special days). Also add 'is' after 'that' to form 'that is why'. Consider punctuation to separate clauses.'

× 'my mother bought it for me in my birthday when I was five years old.'

✓ 'my mother bought it for me on my birthday when I was five years old.'

'on' is the correct preposition to use with 'birthday'. 'In my birthday' is incorrect usage.'

× 'I love it, but now I don't actually know where it is.'

✓ 'I loved it, but now I don't actually know where it is.'

'Loved' matches the past reference to the bike owned in childhood; keeping 'love' creates a tense inconsistency. Use past tense to reflect past feeling about that specific bike.'

× 'Well, I would say that Thailand in Thailand bike used to be popular like fifteen years ago, but nowadays I would say it's not anymore.'

✓ 'Well, I would say that bikes in Thailand used to be popular about fifteen years ago, but nowadays I would say they are not anymore.'

'Thailand in Thailand' is redundant and incorrect word order; 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally; 'used to' is correct for past habit; 'it's not anymore' should refer to 'they are not anymore' to match plural subject.'

× 'People tend to use more cars or public transportation because it's more convenient and easy for them to commute.'

✓ 'People tend to use cars or public transportation more because it is more convenient and easier for them to commute.'

'more' should modify the verb phrase and is clearer after the objects: 'use cars or public transportation more'; 'easy' should be the comparative 'easier' to contrast with alternatives; 'it's' can be expanded to 'it is' for clarity.'