Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct repetition and grammar, and add a clear linking word to connect ideas. Use one topic sentence, then give specific supporting details (when, who, where). Also correct word choice (e.g., 'rode' instead of 'raised') and remove duplicate words.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a large yellow bike, and I used to ride it every weekend with my friends around our neighborhood. For example, we often went to nearby parks to ride and explore new paths.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a clean linking word. Fix grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'cheap and convenient', 'bike parking'), and avoid vague phrases like 'if you walk down'.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people use them for short trips to work or the market, and you can see numerous bike parking areas near shops and stations.

× Yes I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Missing comma after introductory Yes. This is punctuation rather than tense, but keep past tense 'had' which is correct for childhood. Add comma for clarity: 'Yes, I had...'. Suggestion: Insert a comma after introductory words like 'Yes' or 'No'.

× It was a big, big yellow bike and I used to ride it every weekend with my friends around neighborhood neighborhood.

✓ It was a big yellow bike, and I used to ride it every weekend with my friends around the neighborhood.

Repetition 'neighborhood neighborhood' is a duplication (sentence structure error). Also needs article 'the' before 'neighborhood' to specify the area. Include a comma before 'and' connecting two independent clauses. Suggestion: Remove duplicate word, add 'the' and comma: '...around the neighborhood.'

× We often raised and explored nearby parks.

✓ We often rode and explored nearby parks.

The verb 'raised' is incorrect in this context; intended meaning is 'rode' (past tense of 'ride'). This is a word choice/past tense error. 'Rode' correctly describes using bikes in the past. Suggestion: Use the past tense verb that matches the activity: 'rode'.

× Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and easy and if you walk down, you will see many bikes park tash.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and easy to use, and if you walk down the street, you will see many parked bikes.

Multiple errors: 'easy' needs clarification 'easy to use' (adjective usage); 'if you walk down' is incomplete—add 'the street' (preposition/article issue); 'bikes park tash' is incorrect word order and wrong words. Use passive participle 'parked' to describe bikes and place noun 'bikes' after. Corrections address present tense and noun phrase structure. Suggestion: Rephrase to 'cheap and easy to use' and 'you will see many parked bikes'.