Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer conveys the main idea and relevant personal detail, but it has repetition, some grammatical errors, and unnatural phrases that reduce clarity. To improve, make a clear topic sentence, avoid redundant words, correct grammar (e.g., tense and articles), and use one or two supporting details with a linking word. Keep the response within 3–4 concise sentences.

Exemplo: I didn't have a bike as a child because I was afraid of getting injured. For example, whenever I tried to ride, my heart would race and I felt unstable. As a result, I avoided learning to cycle until I was older.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and gives examples, but it contains repetition, minor grammar issues, and an unfinished ending. To improve, start with a concise topic sentence, use linking words to organise examples, correct small errors (avoid repeated words and unnecessary articles), and finish the statement cleanly. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'commonly used', 'used by people of all ages').

Exemplo: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For instance, people of all ages use them—from older adults going to the supermarket to children learning to ride. Therefore, cycling is a common and convenient mode of transport here.

× I actually didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of being injured and I didn't know how to ride it very properly.

✓ I actually didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of getting injured and I didn't know how to ride it properly.

Use of 'being injured' is awkward here; 'getting injured' is the natural verb phrase for experiencing injury. Also 'very properly' is redundant; 'properly' alone is correct. Suggestion: Replace 'being injured' with 'getting injured' and remove 'very' before 'properly'.

× Whenever I tried to to ride the bicycle, I could hear my heartbeat so, so fast.

✓ Whenever I tried to ride the bicycle, I could hear my heartbeat beating so fast.

The phrase 'tried to to ride' contains a duplicated 'to' (typo). After 'hear' when describing a sound perceived, use the present participle (verb + -ing) to indicate the action: 'hear my heartbeat beating.' Also remove redundant 'so, so.' Suggestion: Delete duplicate 'to', use 'beating' after 'hear', and use single 'so' or remove it.

× So I avoided bicycle.

✓ So I avoided bicycles.

Direct object 'bicycle' needs to be plural or with an article. 'Avoid' typically takes a plural noun when speaking generally. Use 'bicycles' to refer to them in general. Suggestion: Use plural 'bicycles' or add an article like 'the bicycle' if referring to a specific one.

× It's where by any means.

✓ I avoided them by any means.

'It's where by any means' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended meaning is that the student avoided bicycles by any means. Use clear subject and object and the phrase 'by any means' after the verb. Suggestion: Rephrase to 'I avoided them by any means' or better 'I avoided them whenever I could.'

× I firmly believe that bicycles are popular in our country because everywhere you go, everywhere you turn, people will be riding bicycles.

✓ I firmly believe that bicycles are popular in our country because everywhere you go, people are riding bicycles.

Using 'will be riding' suggests future progressive and is inappropriate here; present progressive 'are riding' expresses the general current observation. Also 'everywhere you go, everywhere you turn' is repetitive; simplify. Suggestion: Use present progressive 'are riding' for habitual/current observation.

× Even older people, they use it whenever they want to go to the supermarket.

✓ Even older people use them whenever they want to go to the supermarket.

'Even older people, they' is a redundant subject pronoun construction. Also 'it' does not agree in number with 'bicycles.' Use 'older people use them' or simply 'older people use bicycles.' Suggestion: Remove the extra pronoun and match pronoun number to the noun.

× Children will be will be learning how to ride the bicycles.

✓ Children will be learning how to ride bicycles.

There is a duplicated phrase 'will be will be.' Keep a single future progressive 'will be learning' if describing an ongoing future; if general present habit, use 'are learning' or 'learn.' Also 'the' before 'bicycles' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Suggestion: Remove duplicate 'will be' and omit 'the' before 'bicycles' or use present tense for habitual action.

× So I actually think that bicycles are very popular in our.

✓ So I actually think that bicycles are very popular in our country.

The sentence ends with 'in our' which is incomplete; the noun 'country' is missing. Add the noun to complete the prepositional phrase. Suggestion: Complete the phrase with 'country' or another appropriate noun.