Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and conflicting statements (e.g., saying you used to ride but then saying you were afraid). Clarify the timeline: explain when you stopped riding and why. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'used to ride', 'no longer ride', 'I gave it up because...').

Exemplo: I used to have a black bike with a small front basket when I was a child. However, I no longer ride because I became afraid after a minor fall; as a result, I stopped cycling regularly.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: give a direct opinion sentence, then provide two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler phrases and repetition. Complete your final thought—finish the sentence about benefits (e.g., health, cost, convenience). Use linking words such as 'for example', 'because', or 'also'.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many people use them to commute to nearby jobs or school, and they also save money on fuel and provide good exercise.

× Yes I used to ride a bike when I was a child but I am not riding a bike anymore I was so afraid to ride one.

✓ Yes, I used to ride a bike when I was a child, but I do not ride a bike anymore because I was too afraid to ride one.

Run-on and inconsistent tense/verb forms: 'I am not riding a bike anymore' is present continuous but expresses a habitual present state, so simple present 'I do not ride' is appropriate. Also 'I was so afraid' should be 'I was too afraid' for naturalness. Add commas to separate clauses and join ideas with 'because' to show reason. Suggestions: use simple present to describe current habits, keep past tense for past states, and connect clauses with coordinating/subordinating conjunctions.

× It was black in color and it had a small basket in front.

✓ It was black and had a small basket on the front.

Redundant phrase 'black in color' can be simplified to 'black'. Use 'on the front' or 'at the front' rather than 'in front' when describing a part of the bike. Also avoid repeating the subject 'it' when not needed: 'It was black and had...'. Suggestions: remove redundant phrasing and use correct prepositional phrase for position.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country. People most people use bikes to travel to nearby places, to schools, to work and it's also It is also cheap and effective like you do not have to buy petrol or diesel or any other kind of fuels and it also keeps

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country. Most people use bikes to travel to nearby places, to school and to work. They are also cheap and efficient because you do not have to buy petrol, diesel or other fuels, and cycling is good for your health.

Multiple issues: repetition ('People most people'), mixed singular/plural and awkward phrasing ('to schools' should be 'to school' for general travel), run-on sentence and unfinished thought ('it also keeps'). Use concise sentences: 'Most people' not 'People most people'; 'to school' is the common collocation; 'cheap and efficient' is better than 'cheap and effective'; 'other kind of fuels' should be 'other fuels'. The final clause likely intended to say a health benefit, so finish the idea: 'and cycling is good for your health.' Suggestions: avoid repetition, keep parallel structure in lists, finish ideas, and choose correct collocations (to school, other fuels).