Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce repetition and make sentences clearer and more concise. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammatical errors (e.g., tense and word order) and avoid hesitations.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I bought my first bike when I was 12, and I used it to ride to school every day. Because it was lightweight and reliable, it became my main way of getting around and I remember enjoying the independence it gave me.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion in one sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Avoid fillers like “umm” and incomplete sentences. Provide at least one concrete example or trend to justify your view.

Exemplo: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country at the moment. For example, more people now prefer cars and public transport due to faster travel and better road infrastructure, so cycling has declined in cities compared with ten years ago.

× Yes, I did. When I I think when I was in when I was 12 I bought my first bike and I used to go to school by my bike.

✓ Yes, I did. I think when I was 12 I bought my first bike and I used to go to school on my bike.

This sentence has repetition and sentence structure issues (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). The word 'I' is repeated and the phrase 'when I was in when I was 12' is redundant and ungrammatical. Also, the preposition 'by' with 'bike' is less natural than 'on' in this context. Suggestion: remove the repeated words, keep a single time clause 'when I was 12', and use the natural preposition 'on' for riding a bicycle. Example improvement: 'I think when I was 12 I bought my first bike and I used to go to school on my bike.'

× Umm, well, I don't think so. I don't think it's popular that much lately in my country. Because less people.

✓ Umm, well, I don't think so. I don't think it's very popular lately in my country because fewer people ride bikes.

This contains two issues: awkward adverb/quantifier choice and a fragment (Grammar Problem Type IDs 14 and 26). 'That much' is informal and misplaced; 'very' or 'so' works better. The clause 'Because less people.' is a sentence fragment and uses 'less' incorrectly for countable people; use 'fewer' and complete the idea by adding a verb, e.g., 'fewer people ride bikes.' Suggestion: combine clauses into one sentence and use 'fewer' for countable nouns.