Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly describe the accident with one or two specific details and a short consequence. Use linking words (for example, “however” or “so”) and correct small grammar issues (e.g. say “after an accident” and “my dad told me to stop”). Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. I had a bike when I was about five years old. However, I had an accident once when I rode across the road and a car nearly hit me, so my father told me to stop riding. Since then I haven’t used a bicycle much.

Sugestão: Start with a clear direct answer, then give two specific reasons linked logically. Correct grammar and word order (e.g. “bicycles are not as popular as cars or motorcycles”). Avoid trailing off—finish the thought with a concrete result or example. Use linking words such as “because” and “for example.”

Exemplo: No, bicycles are not as popular as cars or motorcycles in my country. This is because the government has not built enough bike lanes, and as a result many cyclists face dangerous roads. For example, frequent accidents discourage people from using bikes for daily travel.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was five years old but after the accident like I rode across the road and the car almost crashed me so my dad ordered me to stop riding a bicycle.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was five years old, but after an accident when I rode across the road and a car almost hit me, my dad told me to stop riding a bicycle.

Multiple past-tense and word-choice issues: use 'an accident' (article) and 'when' to connect clauses. 'Car almost crashed me' is incorrect phrasing; use 'a car almost hit me.' 'Ordered me to stop' is grammatical but 'told me to stop' is more natural in this context. Also add commas to separate clauses. Suggestions: use correct past tense forms and natural verbs ('hit' instead of 'crash' in this context), include appropriate articles, and punctuate clauses with commas.

× In my opinion, I think bicycle not as much as popular like car or motorcycle because the governments didn't create the lane for bicycles and in Thailand there are many numerous accidents like the

✓ In my opinion, I think bicycles are not as popular as cars or motorcycles because the government has not created lanes for bicycles, and in Thailand there are many accidents.

Several tense, agreement, and article errors: 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' to match general statement (singular/plural issue and subject-verb agreement), so use 'are not' (present tense). The comparative structure is 'not as ... as' (not 'not as much as popular like'). 'Governments' should be singular 'the government' for a country, and 'didn't create' is past tense; use present perfect 'has not created' to indicate an ongoing situation. 'Lane' should be plural 'lanes'. 'Many numerous accidents' is redundant; use 'many accidents' or 'numerous accidents'. Remove trailing 'like the'. Suggestions: use correct plural forms, proper comparative structure 'not as ... as', present perfect for ongoing effects, and avoid redundant modifiers.