Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb tense (past) and avoid unrelated or unlikely details (e.g., riding a child’s mini bike to New York). Keep answers concise (max 4–5 short sentences) and use linking words (for example, because, so) to make it coherent.

Exemplo: Yes. I had a small bicycle when I was a child. My parents gave it to me for my fifth birthday because they wanted to encourage me to play outside. I enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood, especially on weekends with my friends.

Sugestão: Answer directly and support with specific reasons and one clear example. Use comparative language correctly and correct word order. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore, for instance) to connect ideas. Be concise and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many middle-class students and workers prefer bikes since they save money on fuel and are easy to park. I personally use my bike regularly to travel to college and visit relatives.

× Yeah, I have a bike when I was a child and the bike was gifted to me by my parents when I was at raised to five years because it's my birthday they gifted me a mini bike as compared to the huge or professional bike.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child; the bike was gifted to me by my parents when I was around five years old because it was my birthday. They gave me a mini bike instead of a large or professional one.

The original mixes present tense 'have' with past-time expressions 'when I was a child' causing a tense inconsistency (Present tense issue). Use simple past 'had' to match the past time frame. Also use 'was around five years old' for natural age expression and 'gave' instead of 'gifted' (both are acceptable but 'gave' is more natural). Use a semicolon or sentence break to separate ideas and 'instead of' to compare items.

× I enjoyed a lot.

✓ I enjoyed it a lot.

The sentence lacks an object for 'enjoyed' when referring to the experience (Past tense issue). Add 'it' to make the verb transitive: 'I enjoyed it a lot.'

× I rode on this bike to New York.

✓ I rode this bike to New York.

The verb 'ride' in past tense is 'rode'; the preposition 'on' is unnecessary with 'rode' when followed by the object 'this bike' (use 'rode this bike'). Removing 'on' yields a more natural phrasing.

× I guess in my country bikes are much popular as compared to motor cars because bikes are easily easy to purchase everyone and it is valuable for money for every middle class and average person in my country.

✓ I guess bikes are more popular than motor cars in my country because bikes are easy for everyone to buy and are good value for money for middle-class and average people.

The original uses awkward comparative and tense/forms (Present tense issue). Use 'are more popular than' for comparison and 'easy for everyone to buy' for natural expression. Replace 'it is valuable for money' with 'are good value for money', and simplify 'every middle class and average person' to 'middle-class and average people.'

× I also have a bike where I use often to go my relatives as well as to go college for my studies.

✓ I also have a bike that I often use to visit my relatives and to go to college for my studies.

The sentence uses incorrect relative clause 'where' and wrong word order (Present tense issue). Use 'that' for things and place adverb 'often' before the main verb: 'I often use'. Use 'visit my relatives' and 'go to college' for correct prepositional usage.