Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Avoid repetitions and filler words. Use linking words (for example, “when,” “so,” “but”) and correct prepositions (“at age five,” “back home”). Also provide a brief reason or feeling to enrich the answer.

Exemplo: Yes. I had a road bike when I was about five years old. I rode it to and from school every day, but it was quite poor quality so it often needed repairs.

Sugestão: Make the response grammatically correct and more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting facts or reasons using linking words (for example, “because,” “however,” “for instance”). Avoid vague percentages unless you are confident, and replace fillers like “uh” and repeated words.

Exemplo: Not really. Most adults prefer cars because public transport and driving are more convenient, so bicycles are uncommon among commuters. However, some children still ride bikes for fun, especially in parks or residential areas.

× Yeah, I used to have a bike when I was a child and, and five years old and it was a road bike.

✓ Yeah, I used to have a bike when I was a child, when I was five years old, and it was a road bike.

Redundant tense/time expressions and punctuation: the student mixed 'when I was a child' and 'and five years old' without proper structure. Use parallel clauses with 'when' to indicate time. Also add commas to separate ideas for clarity. Suggestion: choose one time phrase or combine properly as shown.

× I used to, to go to school every day and come back to home, Uh, but it was a poor quality.

✓ I used to go to school every day and come back home, but it was poor quality.

Unnecessary repetition 'to, to' is an error; 'used to' should be followed by the base verb (go). 'Come back to home' is incorrect preposition use: 'home' does not need 'to'. Also 'a poor quality' should be 'poor quality' or 'of poor quality'—the article is unnecessary here. Suggestion: remove duplicate 'to', use 'come back home', and omit the article.

× Uh, general bikes are not so popular in my country.

✓ General bikes are not very popular in my country.

'Not so' is informal and less precise; 'not very' is standard for present-tense statements. The sentence otherwise is grammatically acceptable; suggestion: use 'not very' for clearer, more natural expression.

× Like 90% of us just using just use a car not a bike button and children like maybe 40% of them using care bikes just for.

✓ About 90% of adults here just use a car instead of a bike, and children: maybe 40% of them only use bikes for short trips.

Multiple structural and word-choice errors: 'Like 90% of us' is informal—'About 90% of adults' is clearer. Repeated words 'using just use' are redundant. 'Bike button' is nonsensical; context suggests 'not a bike, but a car' or similar. 'Using care bikes just for' is incomplete; likely intended 'use bikes just for short trips.' Suggestions: specify the subject (adults), remove redundant verbs, replace unclear words, and complete the idea about children's bike use.