Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, use correct grammar and natural phrasing, and add one specific supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide a brief reason or memory using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid repetition and limit to up to five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. It was a small red bike my mum gave me when I was seven, and I loved it. I rode it every afternoon around the neighborhood because it made me feel independent and helped me make friends. Because the bike was light and easy to handle, I learned to ride without training wheels quickly.

Sugestão: Give a direct, grammatical topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples using linking words. Correct subject-verb agreement and choose clear vocabulary (e.g., 'popular' with 'are', 'good for the environment'). Keep it coherent and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use bikes for short trips in cities because cycling is cheaper and better for the environment. In addition, some cities have built bike lanes and shared-bike programs, which makes cycling more convenient and safe.

× Yes, I did Yes I did It was a red bike my mum gave it to me and I really liked the one.

✓ Yes, I did. It was a red bike my mum gave me, and I really liked it.

Problems: run-on sentence and pronoun use. 'gave it to me' is wordy; 'gave me' is more natural. 'the one' is incorrect reference; use 'it'. Also punctuation needed to separate clauses. Suggestion: use periods or commas to separate ideas and use 'gave me' and 'it' for clarity.

× I enjoyed to use the bike when I was young.

✓ I enjoyed using the bike when I was young.

After the verb 'enjoy', use the -ing form (gerund), not the infinitive with 'to'. Replace 'to use' with 'using'. This creates a grammatically correct and natural sentence.

× Yes, it does. Yeah, because my country is popular for car and bikes to the environment environment made sustainable, so it's I guess popular

✓ Yes, I think so. My country is known for cars and bikes because they are better for the environment and make it more sustainable, so I guess they are popular.

Multiple errors: 'it does' is inappropriate for a general opinion about bikes; use 'I think so' or 'Yes, I think they are'. Subject-verb agreement and plural forms: 'car and bikes' should be 'cars and bikes'. Awkward phrasing 'to the environment environment made sustainable' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'they are better for the environment and make it more sustainable'. Ensure pronouns agree: 'they are popular' referring to cars and bikes. Also remove repeated word 'environment' and fix sentence fragments.