Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., plural/singular, articles) and reduce filler words like “umm.”

Exemplo: Yes. I had a bike from the age of five; my father bought it for me and I loved it. It was pink and decorated with many princess stickers, which made it my favorite bike ever.

Sugestão: Answer directly and organize reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid hesitations. Provide one or two specific reasons or an example to support your opinion.

Exemplo: Not really. In Hanoi most people prefer motorbikes and cars because they are faster and more convenient for commuting. For example, many families use motorbikes to travel to work and school, so bicycles are less common in the city.

× I had a bike when I was 5, my dad bought it for me and I really like it.

✓ I had a bike when I was five; my dad bought it for me and I really liked it.

The sentence mixes past events with a present-tense verb 'like'. When describing past experiences (had, bought), follow with past-tense 'liked' for consistency. Also write numbers as words in formal speech: 'five'. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to avoid a run-on sentence.

× I think that that is my favorite bike ever and I like it the most.

✓ I think that was my favorite bike ever and I liked it the most.

Again, the speaker refers to a past possession, so use past tense 'was' and 'liked'. The phrase 'favorite bike ever' is acceptable but keep verb tenses consistent. 'The most' is redundant with 'favorite'; keep one: 'liked it the most' or 'was my favorite'.

× Umm it was pink and had many Princess on there.

✓ It was pink and had many princesses on it.

The noun 'Princess' should be lowercase and plural 'princesses' to match 'many'. Also use the pronoun 'it' instead of 'there' to refer to the bike. Capitalization of common nouns should be avoided.

× No, not really, because in my country and I live in the city, I live in Hanoi, so bike are not really popular as motorbike and cars.

✓ No, not really. In my country, and especially where I live in the city of Hanoi, bikes are not as popular as motorbikes and cars.

The original is a run-on with unclear structure. Break into clearer sentences and reorder phrases: 'In my country' and 'I live in the city, I live in Hanoi' is repetitive; combine them. Use plural 'bikes' and compare with 'motorbikes and cars' using 'not as popular as'. Also use 'motorbikes' plural and 'bikes' plural for subject-verb agreement.

× I think because motorbike and cars are more pop, more popular, faster and. MMM.

✓ I think motorbikes and cars are more popular and faster.

Ensure subjects and verbs agree: use plural 'motorbikes and cars' with 'are'. Remove fragmented 'more pop' and the trailing 'and.' which is incomplete. 'More popular' and 'faster' are sufficient; avoid filler sounds in formal responses.