Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, explain the reason briefly and add a short anecdote or consequence. Keep the answer to no more than five sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'didn't own', 'was frightened', 'traffic').

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because I was too frightened to ride in traffic. As a result, I usually walked to school or took the bus, and I remember once nearly falling while trying to balance on a borrowed bike, which put me off riding for years.

Sugestão: Avoid vague or repetitive statements. Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'so'). Mention who rides bikes (children, commuters), where they ride (parks, streets) or why (convenience, low cost).

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, children often ride in parks after school, and commuters use bicycles in crowded cities because they are cheap and help avoid traffic.

× I never, I never actually had a bike when I was a child because I was really afraid of riding bikes, of riding bikes.

✓ I never actually had a bike when I was a child because I was really afraid of riding one.

This sentence shows unnecessary repetition (duplicate phrases 'I never' and 'of riding bikes, of riding bikes') and a minor issue with plural reference. According to the provided list, treat this as a sentence structure error (ID 26) and a singular/plural issue (ID 1). The repetition makes the sentence awkward and unclear. Use a single negation 'I never actually had a bike' and replace the repeated 'riding bikes' with 'riding one' to avoid redundancy and to refer correctly to a single bike. Suggestion: remove duplicate phrases and use clear pronoun or singular noun ('one') when referring back to 'a bike'.

× I was really afraid of being hit by bikes.

✓ I was really afraid of being hit by a bike.

This sentence uses plural 'bikes' after referring to 'a bike' earlier; that creates a mismatch between singular reference and plural noun (ID 1). It is clearer to use 'a bike' or 'bikes' consistently. Also, 'being hit by a bike' is more natural when describing fear of a single event. Suggestion: keep number consistent with earlier mention and use 'a bike' for clarity.

× I firmly believe that bikes are more popular in our country because most of the children in our country love to ride bikes.

✓ I firmly believe that bicycles are very popular in our country because most children love to ride them.

This sentence repeats phrases ('in our country', 'ride bikes') and uses plural nouns redundantly. Treat as sentence structure error (ID 26) and plural usage (ID 1). Improve by removing repeated geographic phrase, avoiding repeating 'bikes' twice, and using the pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'bicycles'. Also 'bicycles' is a slightly more formal word that fits spoken exam answers. Suggestion: eliminate repeated elements and use pronouns to avoid redundancy.

× Most of them, they like to ride bikes.

✓ Most of them like to ride bikes.

The clause contains an unnecessary resumptive subject 'they' after 'Most of them', which is redundant and disrupts sentence flow. This is a sentence structure issue (ID 26). Remove the extra subject 'they' to produce a concise sentence. Suggestion: say 'Most of them like to ride bikes' or better 'Most children like to ride bikes' to avoid 'them' ambiguity.