Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "also additionally"). Correct common errors: say "my parents never bought me a bike" and "I don't know how to ride a bike". Mention the single incident briefly: "I once fell off and got hurt, so I'm afraid."

Exemplo: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents never bought me one, and I never learned to ride because I once fell off and got injured, so I felt too scared to try again.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details and use linking words to connect ideas. Correct awkward phrasing and avoid repetition like "many many". Provide examples or comparisons (e.g., for short trips or commuting) and finish the thought. Use varied vocabulary: "common", "affordable", "convenient".

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them to commute to work because they are affordable and convenient. For example, students and office workers often ride bikes for short trips, and cities have many bike lanes which makes cycling easier and safer.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence contains a repeated phrase 'when I' causing redundancy and a sentence structure error. Remove the repeated words so the clause reads once. Use: 'when I was a child.'

× This is because my parents never bought for me a bike.

✓ This is because my parents never bought me a bike.

In English, the verb 'buy' with an indirect object does not require the preposition 'for' when the indirect object (me) directly follows the verb. Using 'bought for me a bike' is nonstandard. Use 'bought me a bike' or 'bought a bike for me.'

× Also additionally, I don't know how to ride a bike.

✓ Also, I didn't know how to ride a bike.

The context is past (childhood), so the present tense 'don't know' is inconsistent. Use past tense 'didn't know' to match 'when I was a child.' Also 'also additionally' is redundant; keep a single connector like 'Also.'

× I'm very scared to ride a bike because once I fell off the bike.

✓ I was very scared to ride a bike because I once fell off a bike.

Maintain past tense for childhood context: 'was' instead of 'I'm.' Place 'once' before the verb phrase and avoid repeating 'the bike' unnecessarily; 'a bike' is sufficient. This fixes tense consistency and awkward word order.

× Many people go to their workplaces by bikes.

✓ Many people go to their workplaces by bike.

When describing a mode of transport generally, English uses the singular uncountable form 'by bike' (not 'by bikes'). Keep 'workplaces' plural is fine to match 'many people.'

× Also, bikes are very accessible in my country.

✓ Also, bikes are very accessible in my country.

Sentence is grammatical; no change needed. (Included to show no pronoun error.)

× They can use it in many many circumstances.

✓ They can use them in many circumstances.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural 'bikes'; use 'them.' Also avoid repeating 'many'; use 'many circumstances.' Alternatively 'in many situations.'

× It is very easy to ride a bike and go from.

✓ It is very easy to ride a bike and get around.

The phrase 'go from' is incomplete and unclear. Replace with a natural expression like 'get around' to convey moving between places. Maintain general present tense as statement about bikes in the country.