Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid incorrect phrases (“heard the bike”) and unnecessary filler (uh, like). Use correct tense and simpler vocabulary (poor/low-income family).

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family was low-income and my father worked for the government, so we couldn’t afford items like bicycles or cars. As a result, I usually walked to school or used public transport.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g. “because,” “for example”). Avoid repetitions and vague phrases (“we cannot agree with this treatment 200%”). Use precise vocabulary like “popular,” “common,” “preferences,” and avoid fillers. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many people use motorcycles or bicycles to commute in crowded cities, while others prefer cars for long journeys or family trips.

× No, I never heard the bike in my childhood.

✓ No, I never had a bike in my childhood.

The student used 'heard' (past tense of hear) incorrectly. The intended meaning is possession during childhood, so the correct verb is 'have' in the past tense ('had'). Also 'the bike' is not appropriate; use 'a bike' for general possession. Suggestion: use 'had' for past possession and 'a' for an indefinite item.

× Like I belong to a very poor and the mediocre family and my father was uh, government employee and we were never be able to buy expensive things like cars, bikes and cycles for us in childhood.

✓ I belonged to a very poor, mediocre family; my father was a government employee, and we were never able to buy expensive things like cars or bikes when I was a child.

Multiple issues: 'belong' should be past tense 'belonged' to match 'when I was a child' (present/past tense consistency). 'the mediocre family' should be 'a mediocre family' and 'very poor, mediocre family' should combine adjectives in correct order and punctuation. 'government employee' needs the article 'a'. 'we were never be able' is incorrect: use 'we were never able' (remove 'be'). 'for us in childhood' is awkward; use 'when I was a child' or 'in my childhood'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout, include appropriate articles ('a'), and use clear clause connections (commas / conjunctions).

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. It uses plural 'bikes' appropriately to refer to bikes in general. Included here for completeness; no change required.

× Well, uh, we can say, uh, the bikes are important and the popular in our country, but uh, we cannot agree with this treatment 200% because there are different type of people in any country and they have different likes and dislikes.

✓ Well, we can say that bikes are important and popular in our country, but we cannot fully agree with that because there are different types of people in any country and they have different likes and dislikes.

Problems corrected: remove unnecessary 'the' before 'bikes' and 'popular'. Add 'that' after 'say' for clarity. 'the popular' is incorrect; use 'popular' alone. 'cannot agree with this treatment 200%' is unclear and unidiomatic; replace with 'cannot fully agree with that'. 'different type of people' should be plural 'different types of people'. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary articles, use 'that' to introduce clauses, and ensure count nouns use plural when appropriate.

× Some people like bicycles and cars, while others, uh, like uh, bikes, etcetera.

✓ Some people like bicycles and cars, while others prefer motorcycles or bikes.

Style and clarity: repetition and filler words ('uh') should be removed. 'like bicycles and cars' contrasted with 'like bikes' is repetitive; better to contrast different preferences clearly. 'etcetera' is vague and unnecessary. Suggestion: remove fillers, avoid repetition, and state specific contrasts (e.g., 'motorcycles or bikes').