Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Focus on clear grammar and concise structure: give a direct topic sentence, then one or two supporting details. Correct verb tense (use past tense for childhood), fix pronouns and word order, and avoid filler words. For example, say who owned the bike, how you got it, and one brief memory or use. Keep it to no more than five sentences and use a linking phrase when adding detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It originally belonged to my cousin, and he gave it to me when he grew older. I used it almost every day to ride around the neighborhood, which helped me become more confident on the road.

Sugestão: Clarify the main idea and remove hesitations. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating whether bikes are popular, then support it with specific reasons or examples using linking words (for example, because, therefore, however). Avoid irrelevant words and ensure vocabulary matches the topic (use 'bikes' not 'books' or 'video'). Keep responses specific and concise.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in smaller towns. For example, many people use bicycles for short commutes because they are affordable and practical. In my hometown, there are many factories and narrow streets, so cycling is often faster than driving.

× Yeah, when I was a child, I have a bike.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I had a bike.

The context is past (when I was a child), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Have' is present tense; use 'had' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past simple for habits or possessions in the past (I had).

× Actually it was.

✓ Actually, it was mine.

The original fragment 'Actually it was.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding the object 'mine' clarifies what 'it' refers to and completes the sentence. Suggestion: ensure sentences have necessary complements to convey meaning (subject + verb + object where needed).

× It belonged to my cousin and when he grew up he gave it me to Buick and I usually.

✓ It belonged to my cousin, and when he grew up he gave it to me, and I usually used it.

Multiple issues: the correct verb phrase is 'gave it to me' (preposition placement) and the sentence lacked a clear verb for 'I usually'. 'to Buick' is incorrect and likely a transcription error; removed. Suggestions: place prepositions correctly after verbs (give something to someone) and ensure each clause has a clear verb; if you mean habitual past use 'I usually used it.'

× In my opinion, umm, books, uh, are really, uh, popular in my country because uh, uh, the video is really, uh, umm, pointed, uh, because of uh, uh, factories, uh, are uh, located, uh, in the vicinity of my uh, hometown, and there are.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are really popular in my country because many factories are located in the vicinity of my hometown.

The student said 'books' and 'video' which seem wrong; likely meant 'bikes' and 'people' or 'vehicles'. Main grammatical issues: inconsistent nouns and an unfinished sentence. 'Factories are located' is correct plural use; simplify to a complete sentence. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and complete the thought; use 'many factories are located' for natural plural expression.