Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant adjectives and incomplete endings. Keep to 3–4 sentences and finish ideas fully.

Exemplo: Yes, I did—when I was a child I had a bright red-and-yellow bike with large wheels. It was my favourite because it was sturdy and easy to ride, so I often rode it to the nearby park and the bakery. Overall, it gave me a lot of freedom and happy memories.

Sugestão: Give a direct, clearer opinion, support it with two specific reasons, and avoid vague or inappropriate comments about corruption. Use linking words for coherence and correct basic grammar (subject-verb agreement, article use). Keep answers to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Not really. Cars are the main mode of transport in my city because many people prefer private vehicles, and the public transport system is limited. As a result, cycling is uncommon except for leisure in parks.

× I used to ride it into the park and into the bakery store and then.

✓ I used to ride it to the park and to the bakery.

The sentence contains awkward preposition use and an unnecessary conjunction 'and then'. 'Used to' correctly expresses past habitual action, but 'ride it into the park' is unnatural; 'ride to the park' is correct. 'Bakery store' is redundant; 'bakery' suffices. Remove 'and then' which leaves the sentence incomplete. Suggestion: use 'I used to ride it to the park and to the bakery.'

× No they are not people around here all white cars drive cars so the car are the main way for transportation in here.

✓ No, they are not. People around here mostly drive cars, so cars are the main means of transportation here.

Multiple number and agreement errors: 'the car are' mixes singular article with plural verb; 'cars are' is correct. 'all white cars drive cars' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'people around here mostly drive cars'. 'way for transportation' is awkward; 'means of transportation' or 'mode of transportation' is appropriate. Also add punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: rephrase to 'People around here mostly drive cars, so cars are the main means of transportation here.'

× No they are not people around here all white cars drive cars so the car are the main way for transportation in here.

✓ No, they are not. People around here mostly drive cars, so cars are the main means of transportation here.

The original sentence lacks necessary pronouns and connectors, causing a run-on and unclear subject reference. Inserting 'People' clarifies the subject. Also change 'they are not' to respond to the question properly with punctuation: 'No, they are not.' This corrects pronoun and sentence structure issues. Suggestion: separate into two sentences and supply the missing subject 'People'.

× Even public transportation aren't that easy and available because the government is a bit uh, corrupted and doesn't provide public transportation so either.

✓ Even public transportation isn't very easy to use or widely available because the government is somewhat corrupt and doesn't provide sufficient public transportation.

Errors: subject-verb agreement ('public transportation aren't' should be 'public transportation isn't' because 'transportation' is an uncountable singular noun). Repetition 'doesn't provide public transportation so either' is ungrammatical; use 'doesn't provide sufficient public transportation.' 'Corrupted' is improperly used for people or systems; 'corrupt' describes the government. Suggestion: use 'is somewhat corrupt' and 'isn't very easy to use or widely available.'

× It had red and yellow color in it and very large wheels.

✓ It had red and yellow colors and very large wheels.

The phrase 'red and yellow color in it' is incorrect; use plural 'colors' to match two colors. Also 'in it' is unnecessary. The rest is fine in past tense. Suggestion: say 'It had red and yellow colors and very large wheels.'

× It was so nice and beautiful. It was picturesque.

✓ It was so nice and beautiful; it was picturesque.

Stylistically repetitive but grammatically acceptable. Combine sentences for flow or choose one strong adjective. 'So nice and beautiful' is redundant; use 'very beautiful' or 'truly picturesque.' Suggestion: simplify to 'It was very beautiful and picturesque.'