Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer communicates the idea but has several grammatical errors, unclear phrases, and repetition. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence: "Yes, I did." 2) Correct tense and word choice (e.g., 'kept' instead of 'write', 'rode' for past, 'cherish' as a verb). 3) Use one or two linking words to add detail (e.g., "because", "so"). 4) Limit to 3–4 clear sentences and avoid filler sounds like 'umm'. Specific steps: revise sentences to be grammatically correct, use past tense consistently, and include a short reason or memory to enrich the answer.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My grandmother gave me a bicycle for my birthday when I was seven, and I rode it to school and to the park on weekends. I remember feeling very happy because it let me spend more time outdoors with my friends, which I still cherish.

Sugestão: Good attempt at comparing past and present, but the response has grammar and pronunciation issues and some awkward phrasing. To improve: 1) Begin with a clear direct answer: "They were more popular before, but less so now." 2) Use correct grammar for comparisons (e.g., 'safer' not 'more safety') and subject-verb agreement. 3) Add a concise reason using a linking phrase (e.g., "because" or "as a result"). 4) Keep it to 2–3 sentences with specific reasons or an example (e.g., urban commuting or long distances).

Exemplo: Bicycles used to be quite popular, but they are less common now. Because cars and public transport have improved, many people prefer cars since they are safer and more convenient for long journeys.

× Yes, when I was a child my grandma sent me a bike as a birthday gift.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my grandma sent me a bike as a birthday gift.

No change needed for tense here; sentence correctly uses past simple 'sent' to describe a completed action in the past. Keep consistency with 'when I was a child.'

× I really appreciate and I really write it until umm go to school or umm on weekends usually ride a bike to go outside with friends.

✓ I really appreciated it and I rode it until I went to school, and on weekends I usually rode the bike to go out with friends.

Original sentence mixes present tense with past events and has missing subjects and incorrect verbs. Use past tense (appreciated, rode, went) to match 'when I was a child.' Add subjects ('I') and correct verb forms. Also change 'write it' to 'rode it' (likely intended). Use 'go out' instead of 'go outside.'

× Isn't my happiness time and it it really a cherish it.

✓ It was my happiest time and I really cherished it.

Original is ungrammatical and redundant ('it it', 'a cherish it'). Rephrase to a clear past-tense sentence: 'It was my happiest time' (adjective use) and 'I really cherished it' (past tense verb). This fixes sentence structure and word choice.

× In the past time, yes, I would say yes, it is.

✓ In the past, yes, I would say they were popular.

Sentence mixes time references and pronouns. 'In the past' refers to past time, so use past tense 'were' and plural 'they' to refer to bikes. Avoid 'it is' which is singular and present.

× But now with you know the technology are advanced so people prefer to choose the car because car is more safety than riding the bike and it is more effective especially when you go too far away.

✓ But now, because technology has advanced, people prefer to choose cars because cars are safer than riding bikes and they are more convenient, especially when you go far away.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('technology are' should be 'technology has advanced'), article and number errors ('the car' should be 'cars' when speaking generally), adjective/adverb choice ('more safety' -> 'safer'), pronoun agreement ('it is' -> 'they are'), and wording ('more effective' -> 'more convenient' or 'practical'). Also remove filler 'you know' and correct 'too far away' to 'far away.' These corrections fix tense, agreement, articles, and word choice to match general present preference.