Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and articles (e.g., "when I was a child", "I was seven years old", "as a reward for getting first place"). Avoid filler sounds (uh) and repetition. Aim for 2–3 sentences and include one specific detail about how you used the bike.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I was seven years old when my father gave it to me as a reward for getting first place in my class, and I rode it every day to visit friends and run small errands for several years.

Sugestão: Make a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words and correct grammar. Use vocabulary like "affordable", "commute", and avoid fragmented sentences. Give one specific example (e.g., commuting to work or markets). Keep it within 2–3 sentences and connect ideas with words like 'because' and 'for example'.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to commute. For example, many people use motorcycles to travel to work or to market since they cost less than cars and are easier to park.

× I was 7 year old when my father gifted me my first bike in the reward of I got first position in 5th, 5th standard.

✓ I was 7 years old when my father gifted me my first bike as a reward for getting first position in 5th standard.

'Year' should be plural as 'years' with an age; 'in the reward of' is incorrect — use 'as a reward for'; 'I got' in this noun phrase should be the gerund or verbal noun structure 'getting' or a clause 'for getting'; remove the repeated '5th'. Use natural word order: 'as a reward for getting first position in 5th standard'. Suggestion: say 'I was 7 years old when my father gifted me my first bike as a reward for getting first place in 5th grade.'

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'child'. English requires 'a child' to indicate age category. Suggestion: always include appropriate articles with singular countable nouns: 'a child', 'a bike'.

× Uh, so just for uh, appreciation, my father gifted me a bike that time and I used to use that daily for several years.

✓ So, just as appreciation, my father gifted me a bike then and I used to use it daily for several years.

Use 'then' instead of 'that time' for natural past narrative; 'that time' is awkward. Pronoun: replace repeated noun with 'it' for the bike. 'Used to' is correct for habitual past. Suggestion: simplify to 'he gifted me a bike then and I used it daily for several years.'

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in our country because many people use that as a affordable option.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in our country because many people use them as an affordable option.

'That' is wrong reference for plural 'bikes' — use 'them'. 'A affordable' is incorrect article-noun agreement; use 'an affordable' before a vowel sound. Suggestion: 'many people use them as an affordable option.'

× Everyone is not accessible to to manage cars or jeeps.

✓ Not everyone can afford to manage cars or jeeps.

'Everyone is not accessible to to manage' is ungrammatical. Use 'Not everyone can afford' or 'Not everyone has access to' depending on intended meaning. Also duplicate 'to'. Suggestion: use 'Not everyone can afford cars or jeeps' or 'Not everyone has access to cars or jeeps.'

× So bikes. They use bike for their daily routine.

✓ So people use bikes for their daily routine.

Fragment 'So bikes.' is incomplete. Subject and verb order is awkward: 'They use bike' should be 'They use bikes' or better 'people use bikes.' Use plural 'bikes' to match 'they' and natural collocation 'use bikes for their daily routine.' Suggestion: combine into one sentence: 'So people use bikes for their daily routines.'

× They go to the offices, colleges and marketers owned by.

✓ They go to offices, colleges and markets that they own or to markets owned by them.

'Marketers owned by' is ungrammatical. Likely intended 'markets owned by them' or simply 'markets'. 'The offices'/'the colleges' unnecessary; 'go to offices, colleges and markets' is natural. Suggestion: 'They go to offices, colleges and markets.'