Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise, use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with correct grammar and linking. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “at the age of my day.”

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bicycle when I was six, and I remember feeling thrilled to receive it. I used to ride it every afternoon around my neighbourhood, which helped me become more confident and independent.

Sugestão: Be more precise and fix grammar and word choice errors. Begin with a clear opinion, then add two specific supporting points linked logically. Use plural/singular agreement and correct prepositions, and avoid vague phrases like “some place.”

Exemplo: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in many parts of my country, particularly in cities and university towns, because they are inexpensive and often faster than cars in heavy traffic. For example, many students and office workers cycle to save time and money, and I sometimes ride to work when the weather is good.

× I have a bicycle which I brought at the age of my day.

✓ I had a bicycle which I got when I was a child.

The student used present perfect 'have' and 'brought' incorrectly when referring to childhood possession; the question asked about the past. Use simple past 'had' and 'got' (or 'was given') to match past time reference. Also 'at the age of my day' is ungrammatical and should be 'when I was a child' or 'when I was X years old'. Suggestion: Use simple past for past situations and clearer time expressions (e.g., 'when I was a child' or 'at the age of six').

× Dad brought that at the age of 6 years old and I was very happy when he gifted me that bicycle.

✓ My dad bought it when I was six years old, and I was very happy when he gave me the bicycle.

The verb 'brought' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is that the father purchased it, so use 'bought'. Also 'at the age of 6 years old' is redundant; use 'when I was six years old' or 'at the age of six'. 'Gifted me' is grammatical but less natural than 'gave me'. Suggestion: Use 'bought' for purchase, avoid redundant age phrases, and prefer natural verbs like 'gave'.

× Well, I think bikes are quite popular in some place of my country, especially in cities and university towns, because they are cheaper and easy to use in traffic.

✓ Well, I think bikes are quite popular in some parts of my country, especially in cities and university towns, because they are cheaper and easy to use in traffic.

The phrase 'some place of my country' is ungrammatical. Use 'some parts of my country' or 'in some places in my country'. Also 'cheaper and easy to use' mixes comparative and adjective forms; better: 'because they are cheaper and easy to use in traffic' is acceptable, but consider 'because they are cheaper and easier to use in traffic' for parallel structure. Suggestion: Use 'parts' or 'places' and keep parallel adjective forms ('cheaper and easier').

× For example, many students and office workers ride bikes to save time and money and I sometime cycle to.

✓ For example, many students and office workers ride bikes to save time and money, and I sometimes cycle too.

Errors: 'sometime' should be the adverb 'sometimes' to indicate frequency; 'to' at the end is incorrect and should be 'too' meaning 'also'. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Tense 'ride' is fine (habitual present). Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' for occasional actions and 'too' for 'also'.