Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid unnecessary or unclear phrases (e.g., “ride inside my home”).

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My father bought me a small blue bicycle when I was five, and I practised riding it in our driveway until I could balance well. As a result, I felt confident riding on quiet streets near my house.

Sugestão: Give a clearer topic sentence, use accurate grammar and linking words, and provide specific reasons or examples. Replace awkward phrases like “save their economic” with “save money” and correct count/usage (short trips, long-distance). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and even longer intercity trips. For example, students and market vendors often cycle to save money and avoid traffic, which makes cycling a practical choice.

× When I was five years old, my dad got me a blue bicycle that I can ride inside my home.

✓ When I was five years old, my dad got me a blue bicycle that I could ride inside my home.

The clause 'that I can ride' refers to a past time (when the student was five), so the verb should be in a past form to match the time frame. Use 'could' (past form of can) to indicate ability in the past. Suggestion: match verb modality to the past context (could instead of can).

× Yes, I do think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people here use it for a short travel or even long travel from city to city.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people here use them for short trips or even long trips from city to city.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use the plural pronoun 'them' (Subject-verb agreement/pronoun reference). Also 'travel' in this context is a noun that should be plural countable 'trips' after 'short'/'long'. Use 'short trips' and 'long trips' to be natural. Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and choose correct noun forms.

× By this way they save their economic.

✓ In this way they save money.

'By this way' is not natural; use 'in this way' or 'by doing this'. The phrase 'save their economic' is incorrect: 'economic' is an adjective and does not fit; the intended noun is 'money' or 'economy'. Here 'save money' is concise and correct. Suggestion: use appropriate prepositions and correct noun forms ('in this way' and 'money').