Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar, use a clear topic sentence, add one specific supporting detail, and avoid repetition. Also correct tense and singular/plural and pronoun agreement. Use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., "however" or "but").

Exemplo: No, I didn't have a bike as a child because my family couldn't afford one. However, I really wanted a bicycle so I could ride to the park with my friends after school.

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct verb forms and redundancy, and give one specific example or statistic to support your statement. Use linking words for clarity (e.g., "for example", "because").

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people cycle to work in cities to avoid traffic, and others use bikes for short trips and exercise.

× Well, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family cannot afford one.

✓ Well, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family could not afford one.

The sentence refers to a past inability to afford something, so the past form of the modal verb should be used. 'Cannot' is present tense; use 'could not' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use 'could not' or 'couldn't' when describing past ability or possibility. ID:4

× I concentrated on the studies when I was a child, but I I wanted to have a bicycle to ride with my friends.

✓ I concentrated on my studies when I was a child, but I wanted to have a bicycle to ride with my friends.

The phrase 'the studies' is unnatural; use the possessive 'my studies' to indicate what the speaker concentrated on. Also there is a duplicated 'I'. This is not a tense issue but a noun phrase/article/pronoun misuse; primary correction uses proper possessive and removes duplicate word. Suggestion: use 'my studies' and proofread to remove repeated words. ID:22

× Oh yeah, absolutely. Bikes are very popular among people in my country because most almost everyone ride a bike to do many things like travel, traveling, going to work and exercising.

✓ Oh yeah, absolutely. Bikes are very popular in my country because almost everyone rides a bike to do many things like travel, go to work, and exercise.

'Most almost everyone' is redundant; choose one quantifier such as 'almost everyone'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'everyone' is singular so use 'rides' not 'ride'. Parallelism and word choice: use base verbs 'travel, go to work, and exercise' rather than mixing 'travel' and 'traveling'. Remove 'among people' as redundant with 'in my country'. Suggestions: use a single quantifier, ensure subject-verb agreement with 'everyone', and keep verb forms parallel. ID:14}]}}, {