Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct verb forms and collocations (e.g., “felt safe for me to ride” → “felt it was safe for me to ride”). Limit to 3–4 sentences and remove hesitations like “uh.”

Exemplo: Yes. I had a bike when I was in Grade 6; my father bought it and taught me how to ride. For the first month he accompanied me to school until he felt it was safe for me to cycle on my own. After that I rode to school regularly.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a brief comparison. Use linking words (e.g., “However,” “Because,” “Nowadays”) and avoid filler sounds. Be specific about time frames and causes (e.g., traffic density, rise of electric bikes).

Exemplo: I think bikes used to be more popular about ten years ago. However, nowadays fewer children cycle to school because streets are more crowded and many families prefer electric bikes or motorbikes for convenience and safety.

× Yes, I used to have yes, I used to have a bike when I was in grade 6, my father bought me and taught me to ride a bike uh, after that, he followed me during the, the, the, the way I went to school for a month uh, after that he uh, he uh, feel safe for me to drive.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was in grade 6. My father bought it for me and taught me to ride. After that, he followed me on my way to school for a month, and then he felt safe letting me ride on my own.

Errors involve incorrect verb forms and usage of gerunds/infinitives. 'Bought me' should be 'bought it for me' to show the object; 'taught me to ride a bike' is acceptable but can be simplified to 'taught me to ride.' 'Followed me during the way I went to school' is incorrect preposition and structure — use 'followed me on my way to school.' 'Feel safe for me to drive' mixes forms; correct is 'felt safe letting me ride' (past tense with gerund after 'let'). Suggestions: use correct object pronouns, choose infinitive vs gerund appropriately (teach somebody to do something; feel safe + gerund phrase), and use proper prepositions ('on my way').

× Yes uh bikes, yeah used to popular in my country umm in the past when uh, ten years ago, uh, but right now, uh children uh rarely go to school uh, by bike because the street air crowded now and lots of uh electric bikes or motorbikes so it's.

✓ Bikes used to be popular in my country about ten years ago, but right now children rarely go to school by bike because the streets are crowded and there are many electric bikes and motorbikes.

Multiple present tense and structure problems: 'used to popular' lacks the verb 'be' — correct is 'used to be popular.' 'When ten years ago' is redundant; use 'about ten years ago' or remove 'when.' 'The street air crowded now' mixes words and tenses; should be 'the streets are crowded now.' Also missing 'there are' before 'many electric bikes.' Suggestions: include necessary linking verbs (be), ensure tense consistency (use past 'used to be' for past habits and present 'are' for current state), pluralize nouns properly ('streets') and use 'there are' to introduce existence.