Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar (past tense consistency and subject-verb agreement), reduce repetition, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "when" or "and") correctly and keep the answer to 2–4 sentences. Be specific about age and who you rode with.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I started riding in the park when I was about five years old, and I often rode with my parents on weekends.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and word choice (use plural/singular consistently and avoid filler words like "uh"). Provide a clear reason with one or two specific details and use linking phrases such as "because" or "so" properly. Mention a clear consequence or example to support your opinion.

Exemplo: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because cities can be extremely crowded. For example, in Seoul many people choose bikes for short trips since buses and subways are often packed during rush hour.

× Yes, yes, I have a bike when I were a child and I also ride the park when I I started like the park when I was five years old and I took a ride with my parents.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I also rode in the park. I started liking the park when I was five years old, and I took rides with my parents.

This sentence contains multiple tense and verb-form errors. 'have' should be past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child' (present tense issue ID 6). 'were' should be 'was' for the singular first-person subject (subject-verb agreement; also fits present tense issue). 'ride the park' is incorrect: with past narrative use 'rode' and the correct preposition is 'in' or 'around' (verb tense and preposition issues; primary issue is present tense/verb form). 'I I started like the park' should be 'I started liking the park' or 'I started to like the park' (verb + -ing form issue but mainly tense/form). Suggestions: use past simple consistently for past events (had, was, rode, started, took) and correct prepositions (in the park). Break long run-on sentence into shorter sentences for clarity.

× Oh yes, it is very popular, uh, transportation in my country.

✓ Oh yes, bicycles are very popular transportation in my country.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'bikes'; using the plural noun 'bicycles' or 'bikes' matches 'are' for plural subject. This is an incorrect use of pronouns leading to number mismatch; change to explicit plural noun and plural verb. Also remove the comma before 'transportation' and use natural word order. Suggestion: use 'Bicycles are very popular' or 'Bikes are a very popular form of transportation'. (Issue ID 12).

× This is because, uh, I live in Sao that is very crowded city, the most crowded city in the South Korea.

✓ This is because I live in Sao, which is a very crowded city, the most crowded city in South Korea.

Problems: 'that' should be 'which' for a non-restrictive clause describing the city; 'very crowded city' needs the article 'a'; 'the South Korea' should be 'South Korea' without 'the' (sentence structure and article errors). Use commas around the non-restrictive clause. Suggestion: 'which is a very crowded city' and omit 'the' before country names like 'South Korea'. (Issue ID 26 and 22).

× So it when we try to light some other transportation such as bus or subway.

✓ So when we try to take other transportation, such as the bus or the subway, they are often crowded.

This sentence is unclear and has multiple structure problems: 'it when we try to light' is incorrect—likely intended 'when we try to take' or 'use' other transportation. 'Some other transportation' is unnatural; use 'other forms of transportation' and include articles 'the bus'/'the subway'. Also add a result clause to complete the idea ('they are often crowded'). Suggestion: rephrase to 'So when we try to use other forms of transportation, such as the bus or the subway, they are often crowded.' (Issue ID 26).