Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and confident. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (e.g. “umm”), and add one brief supporting detail such as why you liked it or how you used it. Keep it under five sentences and use a linking word if adding more information.

Exemplo: Yes. I had a bike from the age of four; it was a bright red tricycle that I rode in the park near my house. Because it had a low seat and wide wheels, I felt safe and learned to balance quickly.

Sugestão: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g. “because” and “for example”). Correct plural and article errors, avoid repetition, and finish with a short concluding phrase. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g. “dedicated lanes” instead of “view dedicated for a line back bikes”).

Exemplo: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars and motorcycles for daily travel. For example, our cities have heavy traffic and very few dedicated bike lanes, so cycling often feels unsafe. As a result, most commuters choose motorized transport.

× I don't think bicycle are are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars and motorcycles for daily travel.

✓ I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars and motorcycles for daily travel.

The noun 'bicycle' should be plural ('bicycles') to match the general plural subject meaning 'bicycles in my country'. Also there is a duplicated word 'are are' which is a typographical error; keep a single 'are' to form correct subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when referring to things in general (e.g., 'bicycles are').

× For example our cities have heavy traffic and view dedicated for a line back bikes so cycling feels unsafe and con.

✓ For example, our cities have heavy traffic and lack dedicated bike lanes, so cycling feels unsafe and inconvenient.

The original sentence has several issues: 'view dedicated for a line back bikes' is ungrammatical and appears to attempt to say there are no dedicated bike lanes; 'con' is an incomplete word, likely 'convenient' or 'dangerous'. Correct sentence structure requires clear subject and verb phrases: 'cities have heavy traffic and lack dedicated bike lanes' and a clear adjective 'inconvenient' to complete the idea. Also add a comma after 'For example' for clarity. Suggestion: Rephrase unclear fragments into standard collocations like 'dedicated bike lanes' and use full words rather than fragments.