Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetitions and filler words (um, uh). Correct pronoun use for objects (use "it" not "her") and prepositions ("bought it for me"). Also finish your thought — don’t leave sentences incomplete.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had a small pink bike that my parents bought for my tenth birthday. It was short and lightweight, which made it easy to ride around the park, and I rode it almost every afternoon after school.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give a clear reason with a linking phrase. Use correct tense and clearer phrasing (e.g., "in my parents' time"), and avoid vague statements. Explain the contrast with a linking word such as "however" or "in the past." Be specific about causes (e.g., removal of bike lanes) and effects (e.g., fewer cyclists).

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are popular now, especially among young people. However, in my parents' time cycling was less common because many bike lanes were removed to widen roads, which increased traffic and made cycling less safe.

× I had a pink pink bike that I love riding Uh, my parents bought it to me as a birthday present and umm, I love her.

✓ I had a pink bike that I loved riding. My parents bought it for me as a birthday present, and I loved it.

Mixed tense and object pronoun errors: 'had' sets past context so 'love' should be past 'loved'. Duplicate word 'pink pink' removed. 'bought it to me' is incorrect preposition use; correct is 'bought it for me'. Referring to a bike with 'her' is informal and can be clearer as 'it'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for descriptions of past events, use 'for' with 'buy' when indicating recipient, and use 'it' for objects.

× The bike was very short and.

✓ The bike was very small.

Incomplete sentence ending with 'and' creates sentence fragment. Also 'short' is awkward for bike size; 'small' or 'low' is better. Suggestion: finish clauses or remove conjunctions to form complete sentences.

× Yes, now it is very popular among young generations.

✓ Yes, now they are very popular among young people.

Agreement and word choice: 'it' refers wrongly to 'bikes' (plural) so use 'they'. 'Young generations' is unnatural; 'young people' is preferred. Maintain present tense 'are' for current general truth.

× It's my parents time.

✓ In my parents' time,

Incorrect noun phrase and punctuation: 'It's my parents time' is ungrammatical. Use possessive form 'my parents' time' and the phrase typically begins 'In my parents' time,' to indicate past era. Suggestion: use 'In my parents' time' to set a time frame.

× It wasn't very that popular because the government demolished the bike Rd. so likely due to the traffic jam.

✓ It wasn't very popular because the government removed the bike lanes, likely due to traffic jams.

Awkward phrasing and word choice: 'wasn't very that popular' is incorrect — should be 'wasn't very popular'. 'Demolished the bike Rd.' is incorrect: roads or lanes are not 'demolished' in this context; 'removed the bike lanes' is clearer. Use plural 'traffic jams'. Also reorder phrase 'likely due to traffic jams' at end. Suggestion: use precise nouns ('bike lanes') and correct modifiers.