Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and repetition. Correct tense and article usage (e.g., “when I was a child”, “a middle-class family”, “couldn’t afford”).

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family was middle-class and we couldn’t afford one. However, now my financial situation is better, and I own two bikes.

Sugestão: Use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer linking. Begin with a direct opinion, then add specific reasons or examples and use linking words (for example, because, therefore). Replace vague words like “very good” with concrete reasons (cheap, convenient, fast).

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. For example, many young people use bikes to commute to university or work every day.

× I did not have any bike when I was child because of my family situation.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child because of my family's situation.

This sentence has article and possessive errors and a missing article before 'child'. Use 'a bike' (not 'any bike' in this affirmative past context) and 'a child' requires the article 'a'. Expressing family situation as possessive is natural: 'my family's situation'. Replace 'any' with 'a' for a single countable noun in past affirmative context.

× We are from, uh, we are from middle class family.

✓ We are from a middle-class family.

Countable noun 'family' needs an article: 'a family'. Use hyphenated adjective 'middle-class' before the noun. Also remove the repeated phrase 'we are from'. Keep it concise: 'We are from a middle-class family.'

× We can't afford a bike at that time, but uh, in present we can afford it and I have two bikes in my house.

✓ We couldn't afford a bike at that time, but now we can, and I have two bikes at home.

Speaking about past inability uses the past form 'couldn't' rather than 'can't'. 'At that time' refers to the past, so modal should be past. Use 'now' instead of 'in present' and simplify 'in my house' to 'at home'. Avoid repeating 'afford it' when referring to bikes in general.

× I thinks bikes are popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country.

After subject 'I' the verb must be base form 'think' (no -s). The -s ending is only for third person singular subjects (he/she/it).

× They are very favor favorable by the youngster most youngsters are using in their daily basis.

✓ They are very popular among youngsters; most use them in their daily lives.

The original has multiple problems: 'favorable by' is incorrect for popularity; use 'popular among'. 'Youngster' plural is 'youngsters'. 'Are using in their daily basis' is ungrammatical—use 'use them in their daily lives' or 'on a daily basis'. Split into two clauses for clarity.

× I am also interested in the bikes because it is very easy to ride and it is very good.

✓ I am also interested in bikes because they are very easy to ride and very good.

Use plural noun 'bikes' with plural pronoun 'they' (not 'it'). Match pronouns to the noun number. Also drop the definite article 'the' when speaking generally about bikes.