Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct small hesitations/repetitions, and add one or two specific supporting details (who, where, or a short memory). Use linking words for coherence. Also correct unclear words (e.g., 'UMM') and avoid trailing fragments.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around our town with my cousins, especially in the afternoons after school. Those rides were fun because we would race each other and explore different streets, which helped me become more confident cycling.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and one clear example. Avoid repetition and vague phrases like 'not actually certain'—you can say 'I'm not sure, but I think...'. Use linking words (because, for example, so) and be specific about what bikes help improve.

Exemplo: I'm not completely sure, but I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many children enjoy outdoor activities. For example, parents often encourage cycling since it improves balance and leg strength, and schools sometimes organize bike days to promote exercise.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I've been using it to ride around our town with my UMM, with my my cousins and I'm and I.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I used it to ride around our town with my mum and my cousins.

This sentence contains several problems: incorrect verb tense/continuity and ungrammatical fragments. The student combined past simple ('I had') with present perfect continuous ('I've been using') which is inappropriate when talking about a habit in childhood; use past simple ('I used') to match 'when I was a child'. There are also repetitions ('my my') and an unclear fragment ('and I'm and I') and a likely typo 'UMM' for 'mum'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past habits, remove repetitions and fragments, and use correct noun spelling ('mum').

× I'm not actually certain about that, but I think it is because most of the children in our country are are into outdoor activities and it's good for their gross motor skills because it will help them to strengthen, strengthen.

✓ I'm not actually certain about that, but I think it is because most children in our country are into outdoor activities, and it's good for their gross motor skills because it helps to strengthen them.

Problems here include repeated word ('are are'), awkward pronoun usage ('most of the children' -> 'most children' is more natural), tense and modal choice ('it will help them to strengthen, strengthen' is ungrammatical and repetitive). Use present simple ('helps') to state a general fact about benefits. Also include the object ('them') after 'strengthen'. Suggestion: remove repetitions, use present simple for general truths, and include the correct object for the verb.