Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and odd phrasing (e.g. “which I was suitable for little children”), and limit to about 2–4 sentences. Add one specific detail (when or who gave it to you, or a memorable moment) using a linking word to make it coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had a small pink bicycle when I was six, which my parents gave me for my birthday. Because it was light and child-sized, I rode it every afternoon in the alley near our house and learned to cycle without training wheels by the end of summer.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and avoid long hesitations and unfinished sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, however, therefore) and provide a complete conclusion or comparison to make the answer logical and complete.

Exemplo: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because the climate is hot and humid, which makes cycling uncomfortable for many people. Additionally, the roads are often crowded and not well suited to cyclists, so most people prefer motorbikes or cars instead.

× I had a pink bag, uh, which I was suitable for little children and I loved it so much.

✓ I had a pink bike, which was suitable for little children, and I loved it so much.

The original sentence uses 'bag' but context indicates 'bike'; 'which I was suitable' is incorrect word order and pronoun reference. Use 'which was suitable for little children' to correctly modify 'bike' with the adjective phrase. Also add commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: ensure the relative clause correctly follows the noun and use the appropriate verb 'was' with the adjective phrase.

× I could bike with it, uh, in our alley, uh, in my hometown and I enjoyed it so much.

✓ I could ride it in our alley in my hometown, and I enjoyed it so much.

'Bike' used as a verb is informal and less common; 'ride' is the correct verb for operating a bike. No past participle is required here; the modal 'could' plus base verb 'ride' is correct. Also remove filler sounds and extra commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'ride' after can/could and keep parallel tense structure.

× Well, I suppose they aren't much popular here in my country umm, due to the fact that umm, the climate and umm, temperature is high and due to the bad umm climate in my country, people rather.

✓ Well, I suppose they aren't very popular in my country because the climate and temperature are high, and because of the poor weather people prefer not to use them.

Problems: 'aren't much popular' is incorrect; use 'aren't very popular' or 'are not very popular.' 'Due to the fact that' is wordy; use 'because.' 'Temperature is high' should be 'temperature are high' only if referring to plural? Here 'climate and temperature are high' requires plural verb 'are' because two subjects. 'Bad climate' is redundant; 'poor weather' is clearer. The sentence ended with 'people rather' which is incomplete; complete it to 'people prefer not to use them.' Suggestion: simplify conjunctions, ensure subject-verb agreement with compound subjects, and complete the comparative clause.