Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clear, concise and chronological. Start with a topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “then,” “later,” “because”). Avoid fragments and unnecessary words. Also correct grammar (tense and pronouns) and remove fillers like “yeah.”

Exemplo: Yes. I had a bicycle as a child that I shared with my younger brother. Later, when I was a teenager, I bought my own bike and used it to ride to school and short errands. However, a few years later I sold that bike when I moved to the city and started commuting by bus.

Sugestão: This answer is clear, relevant and well-organised. To improve to a higher band, add one specific example or brief statistic and use a linking phrase to emphasise contrast or cause (e.g., “for example,” “as a result”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary slightly.

Exemplo: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my region because they are much more affordable and practical than cars, which are often expensive and need to be imported. For example, many office workers cycle short distances or use bikes to run errands in crowded city centres. As a result, cycling helps people save time and avoid parking problems.

× I had the bugs before when I was a child that I shared with my young brother.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child that I shared with my younger brother.

The original uses 'the bugs' which is incorrect: 'bugs' is plural and irrelevant. The intended singular noun is 'bike'. Also 'young brother' is nonstandard; 'younger brother' correctly indicates relative age. Use 'a bike' for a nonspecific singular noun.

× But later on when I grew up, I had my own bike that I would ride to work.

✓ But later, when I grew up, I had my own bike that I rode to work.

The phrase 'would ride' can be used for habitual past, but here simple past 'rode' is clearer and matches 'grew up' and 'had'. Using 'would' can be ambiguous; use simple past for specific past habits.

× Is unlike back then whereby would take turns riding.

✓ It was different back then; we would take turns riding.

The original lacks a clear subject and has incorrect structure: 'Is unlike' is ungrammatical and 'whereby would take turns riding' lacks subject. Rewriting with 'It was different' provides a subject and tense, and 'we would take turns riding' correctly expresses habitual past action.

× Yeah, then until sometime you had to sell off my bike.

✓ Yes, later I had to sell my bike.

The original mixes pronouns and tenses: 'you had to sell off my bike' incorrectly uses 'you' instead of 'I' and 'until sometime' is awkward. Use 'later I had to sell my bike' to keep first-person perspective and correct past tense. 'Sell off' is informal; 'sell' is sufficient.

× Yeah. And then find another means of accesses.

✓ And then I had to find another means of access.

The phrase 'means of accesses' is incorrect: 'means' is followed by a singular noun 'access' (uncountable) or 'means of transportation'. Also the sentence lacks subject and past-tense verb; add 'I had to find' to match context.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

This sentence is correct. 'Bikes are' uses correct plural subject-verb agreement and matches question form; no correction needed.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my region because they are much more affordable and practical than cars, which are expensive and often need to be imported.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my region because they are much more affordable and practical than cars, which are expensive and often need to be imported.

This sentence is grammatically correct and coherent; no changes required.

× Many people use bicycles for short commutes and running errands, especially in crowded city areas where driving is slow and parking is difficult.

✓ Many people use bicycles for short commutes and to run errands, especially in crowded city areas where driving is slow and parking is difficult.

The original is mostly acceptable, but parallel structure is improved by using 'for short commutes and to run errands' or 'for short commutes and running errands'. Changing to 'to run errands' ensures parallel verb forms; this is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammatical error.