Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and complete the idea. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (age, feelings, or a memory) and finish with a short concluding sentence. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes. I had a bike when I was about eight, which my parents bought for me as a birthday present. I remember feeling thrilled because it gave me independence and I spent afternoons riding around the neighborhood with my friends. That bike remains one of my fondest childhood memories.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion, then support it with two specific reasons and a brief example. Remove filler words (“Umm,” “I think”) and complete your final thought. Use linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “therefore” to make the response coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines because they are an affordable and practical way to travel short distances. For example, many commuters use bikes to avoid expensive jeepney or taxi fares and to bypass traffic in crowded areas. Therefore, cycling helps many families save money and travel more quickly in congested cities.

× Well, yes, when I was a child, I was given a chance to have my own bike.

✓ Well, yes. When I was a child, I was given the chance to have my own bike.

This sentence mainly needs punctuation and a minor article adjustment. Use 'the chance' rather than 'a chance' when referring to a specific opportunity already implied. Also separate clauses with a period for clarity. No other grammatical category from the provided list strictly applies, so classify as sentence structure and verb agreement related to clarity.

× It was given by my parents.

✓ It was given to me by my parents.

The passive clause is missing the indirect object 'to me' which clarifies who received the bike. Use 'was given to me by my parents' for correct passive construction and clearer meaning.

× And from the time I received that bike, I feel like I'm dreaming and I feel like.

✓ And from the time I received that bike, I felt like I was dreaming.

The time clause 'from the time I received' refers to a past moment, so the main verb should be in the past tense ('felt' and 'was dreaming'), not present ('feel', 'I'm dreaming'). Also remove the trailing incomplete phrase 'and I feel like.' to produce a complete sentence.

× Absolutely yes Umm, I believe that bikes are really useful here in our country, especially here in the Philippines where transportation sometimes are not are no longer affordable.

✓ Absolutely. I believe that bikes are really useful in our country, especially here in the Philippines where transportation is sometimes no longer affordable.

Use 'in our country' rather than 'here in our country' repetition reduced and add punctuation. The main error is subject-verb agreement: 'transportation' (singular) needs the singular verb 'is', not 'are'. Also remove the duplicated 'are' and change word order to 'sometimes no longer affordable' or 'no longer sometimes affordable'—here 'is sometimes no longer affordable' is natural.

× I think with using bikes, I think that people are able to save more money with.

✓ I think that by using bikes, people are able to save more money.

Use the prepositional phrase 'by using bikes' rather than 'with using bikes'. Also remove the redundant 'I think' and the trailing preposition 'with'. The corrected sentence uses a clear gerund phrase and completes the object 'save more money' without an unnecessary final preposition.