Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence (past tense) and avoid repetition. Correct pronouns and verb forms, combine short ideas with linking words, and add one specific detail to enrich the response. Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. I had my own bike when I was about seven because I had just learned to ride. My father was very proud and gave it to me as a present, so I rode it every afternoon around the neighborhood. Riding helped me gain confidence and made my childhood more active.

Sugestão: Make the answer more fluent and grammatically correct. Start with a clear opinion sentence and follow with specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, such as). Remove filler words and correct verb tense and article usage. Provide one concrete example or statistic if possible.

Exemplo: Definitely. Bikes are very popular in Taiwan, especially on university campuses, because they are convenient and campuses often restrict cars. For example, many students ride bikes to class and there are extensive bike lanes and parking areas, which makes cycling faster and cheaper.

× So my father is super happy and she just give me a bike as a gift.

✓ So my father was super happy and he gave me a bike as a gift.

The sentence uses the wrong pronoun 'she' to refer to 'my father' and incorrect verb tense/forms. Replace 'she' with 'he' to match the masculine noun 'father' (pronoun agreement). Also change 'is' to 'was' and 'give' to 'gave' because the action happened in the past ('when I was around 7 years old'), so past tense is required. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns match their antecedents in gender and number, and use past tense verbs when describing past events.

× Yes, I have, I have a bike, my own one when I was around 7 years old 'cause during that time I just learned how to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I did. I had my own bike when I was around 7 years old because I had just learned how to ride.

This sentence mixes present and past tense ('I have' with 'when I was'). Use past tense consistently to describe past experiences: 'did' for the short answer, 'had' for possession in the past, and 'had just learned' for the recent past before that time. Also simplify 'my own one' to 'my own bike' or just 'my bike'. Suggestion: Maintain consistent past tense for past events and avoid redundant words like 'one' after 'my own'.

× I really enjoy the time, like riding a bike.

✓ I really enjoyed the time, like riding my bike.

The speaker is referring to a past experience, so the verb 'enjoy' should be in past tense 'enjoyed'. 'Riding a bike' is fine but specifying 'my bike' is clearer. The problem falls under using the correct verb form for the timeline. Suggestion: Match verb forms to the time frame being discussed; for past experiences use past tense verbs.

× Definitely yes. Uh, I'm studies in undergraduate in until in Taiwan and in the campus like everyone is riding a bike because it is convenient and a lot of spaces is not allowed the umm, auto vehicle to be in.

✓ Definitely yes. I'm an undergraduate student in Taiwan, and on campus almost everyone rides a bike because it is convenient and many areas do not allow motor vehicles.

Multiple issues: 'I'm studies in undergraduate in until in Taiwan' uses incorrect verb form and article; correct form is 'I'm an undergraduate student in Taiwan.' 'In the campus' should be 'on campus.' 'Everyone is riding a bike' is acceptable but habitual action uses simple present 'everyone rides a bike.' 'A lot of spaces is not allowed the auto vehicle to be in' has subject-verb agreement and word order errors; correct is 'many areas do not allow motor vehicles' or 'motor vehicles are not allowed in many areas.' Suggestion: Use 'am' + noun for occupation/status, use 'on campus' for location, use simple present for habitual actions, and keep subject-verb agreement ('areas do not allow').

× So I think the bike is more uh, why they use uh transport.

✓ So I think bikes are a more common form of transport.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and uses pronouns improperly ('why they use uh transport' makes no clear sense). Rephrase to express the intended meaning: general statement about bikes being common. Use plural 'bikes' for general statements and 'are' for agreement. 'Form of transport' is idiomatic English. Suggestion: When making generalizations, use plural nouns and clear noun phrases (e.g., 'bikes are a common form of transport').