Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct verb forms and word order (e.g., “was given to me by my parents on my ninth birthday”). Avoid repetition and keep to at most 3–4 short sentences. Use a linking phrase if you add extra information (e.g., “I remember that…”).

Exemplo: Yes — I had a bike as a child. My parents gave it to me on my ninth birthday, and I used it every day to ride to the park. I remember feeling very proud because it was bright red and faster than other bikes.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and use clearer linking words. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with correct verb forms and quantifiers (e.g., “many children,” “often hold races”). Avoid vague expressions like “every second children.” Use linking words such as “because” or “for example.”

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in Kazakhstan, especially among children. Many families buy bikes for their kids, and children often organize races in parks and neighborhoods, which helps explain their popularity.

× Yes, of course. When I was a child I had a bike which given my given by my parents in my 9th birthday.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child I had a bike which was given to me by my parents on my 9th birthday.

Errors: missing passive auxiliary 'was', missing preposition 'to' after 'given', incorrect repetition 'given my given by', and wrong article/preposition for 'birthday' ('on my 9th birthday'). Suggestion: Use the passive form 'was given', include the indirect object with 'to me', remove duplicate words, and use 'on' with specific days/events. Example pattern: 'a bike which was given to me by my parents on my 9th birthday.'

× In my opinion, in Kazakhstan bikes really popular especially among children, because every second children have a bike and they often doing competition on bikes.

✓ In my opinion, in Kazakhstan bikes are really popular, especially among children, because every second child has a bike and they often have bike competitions.

Multiple errors: missing verb 'are' (be issue/verb), wrong plural noun/pronoun pairing 'every second children' should be singular 'every second child' (singular/plural issue), subject-verb agreement 'children have' incorrect with 'every second' (use 'child has'), and incorrect verb form 'doing competition' should be 'have competitions' or 'compete' (verb form issue). Suggestions: include the correct form of 'be' with plural subject 'bikes are', use 'every second child' when referring to each individual in a statistic, ensure subject-verb agreement ('child has'), and use natural collocations like 'have competitions' or 'often compete.'