Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and clear: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid contradictions and hesitations, use correct grammar (past simple), and give one or two specific supporting details. Keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences) and use linking words like “and” or “because” to connect ideas. Also replace filler sounds (uh, um) with brief pauses.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a simple model made by a local brand called Bhakwan, which my parents gave me for my tenth birthday. I rode it to school and around the neighbourhood because it was faster than walking and very enjoyable.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion first, then add two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because/so/also). Avoid vague or repetitive phrases and gender-biased statements unless you can support them. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., motorcycles, bicycles, commuters, leisure riders). Keep to 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use bicycles and motorcycles because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. Also, younger riders often enjoy sports bikes for leisure and speed, while commuters prefer practical models for daily travel.

× Yes, definitely I haven't bike when I was child ito and the bike is uh the company was uh bhakwan.

✓ Yes, definitely I didn't have a bike when I was a child and the bike's company was Bhakwan.

The student used 'haven't' (present perfect negative) incorrectly for a past simple situation; use past simple 'didn't have'. Also missing article 'a' before 'child' and incorrect noun phrase order; add 'a' and 'a' before 'bike'. 'Company was Bhakwan' needs a possessive or contraction 'bike's company' or rephrase; capitalise proper noun 'Bhakwan'. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past events and include articles where needed.

× It's in uh normal bike when my parents gifted me on my 10th birthday.

✓ It was a normal bike that my parents gifted me on my 10th birthday.

The sentence uses present 'It's' but context is past; change to past 'It was'. Missing article 'a' before 'normal bike' and awkward structure 'when my parents gifted me' should be 'that my parents gifted me' to connect the gift to the bike. Suggestion: match tense to the narrative (past) and include articles for countable nouns.

× Yes, definitely there are variety of bicycles and bikes are available in my country and people are very willingly to ride on bike when they want to reach somewhere, somewhere else and specially they are like a sports bike and and they are riding on it.

✓ Yes, definitely there are a variety of bicycles and bikes available in my country, and people are very willing to ride bikes when they want to go somewhere. Especially, they like sports bikes and ride them for the experience.

'there are variety' needs the article 'a variety' (article errors) and subject-verb phrasing corrected. 'very willingly' is incorrect adverb/adjective use; use 'very willing'. 'ride on bike' should be 'ride bikes' (preposition and countable noun use). 'reach somewhere, somewhere else' is redundant; use 'go somewhere'. 'specially' should be 'especially'. Repetition 'and and' removed. Suggestion: use 'a variety of', choose correct adjective/adverb forms, remove unnecessary prepositions and redundancy.

× It's one kind of experience, it's experience for the men especially.

✓ It's a kind of experience, especially for men.

Redundant 'it's experience' is ungrammatical; use 'a kind of experience'. 'the men' is incorrect article use for general group; use 'men' without 'the'. Also combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use correct articles with countable nouns and avoid unnecessary repetition.