Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, avoid irrelevant or stereotypical explanations, reduce hesitation sounds (uh), and add one or two supporting details using linking words. Keep to under five sentences and use specific details (e.g., who gave the toy, when you used it).

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I played mostly with dolls that my parents bought me, especially during weekends. Because our neighborhood wasn’t very safe for riding, my family preferred I play indoors.

Sugestão: Organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then provide two specific reasons linked with cohesive devices (for example, 'because' and 'therefore') and finish with a short example. Correct basic grammar (e.g., 'traffic jams', 'roads') and avoid incomplete sentences. Use a wider range of vocabulary like 'convenient', 'economical', 'practical'.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because traffic jams are common and bikes save a lot of time. In addition, they are economical and easy to park, so many people use them for short commutes. For example, my neighbor rides a scooter to work and can reach the office much faster than by car.

× Well, I'm a girl, that's why I don't have a bike when I am a child, uh, even when I'm a child, I have some, uh, dolls that I played with and.

✓ Well, I was a girl, so I didn't have a bike when I was a child; even then I had some dolls that I played with.

This sentence contains multiple tense and sentence structure errors (Grammar Problem Type IDs 6 and 26). The speaker talks about past events, so present tense 'I'm' and 'don't have' are incorrect; use past tense 'I was' and 'didn't have'. Also 'when I am a child' should be 'when I was a child'. The clause 'even when I'm a child, I have some dolls that I played with' mixes present and past; change to 'even then I had some dolls that I played with' or simply 'I had some dolls that I played with'. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to improve clarity. Suggestion: consistently use past tense for past experiences and split long run-on sentences into shorter ones.

× Obviously bikes are so popular in my country. Truly speaking, in our country there are very traffic jam in our Rd. So bike is popular. This is because it is very convenient vehicle and easy to go anywhere. Any places without.

✓ Obviously bikes are very popular in my country. To be honest, there is a lot of traffic on our roads, so bicycles are popular. This is because they are very convenient and make it easy to go anywhere, even to places that are hard to reach by car.

This passage contains several errors: incorrect singular/plural usage and subject-verb agreement (IDs 1 and 27), article errors (ID 22/17), incorrect word choice/word form and sentence structure (IDs 13 and 26). 'Bikes are so popular' is acceptable but 'so' is informal; 'very popular' is better. 'There are very traffic jam' is wrong: 'traffic jam' is an uncountable noun phrase and needs 'a lot of' or 'many' with plural; correct: 'there is a lot of traffic' or 'there are many traffic jams'. 'in our Rd.' should be 'on our roads' (preposition and abbreviation issues). 'So bike is popular' should be plural 'bicycles are popular' or 'so bikes are popular'. 'it is very convenient vehicle' needs article and correct pronoun: 'they are very convenient' or 'it is a very convenient vehicle' but since referring to bikes (plural) use 'they are a very convenient way to travel' or 'bicycles are very convenient'. The fragment 'Any places without.' is incomplete; clarify as 'even to places without good public transport' or 'even to places that are hard to reach'. Suggestions: use correct singular/plural forms, match subjects and verbs in number, use articles appropriately, avoid sentence fragments, and choose precise prepositions ('on the road'/'on roads').