Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, use correct tense and grammar, and add a clear topic sentence followed by brief supporting detail. Avoid repetition and fix sentence structure (e.g., use past tense and correct connectors).

Exemplo: I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one, so I played with toys instead. Although I wanted a bike, I learned to enjoy other activities like playing football with friends.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Improve grammar (articles, plural forms) and avoid repeating the main idea. Provide a concise conclusion sentence.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, many people cannot afford cars and there are frequent traffic jams, so cycling is a faster option. Secondly, cycling is an inexpensive way to keep fit and commute daily. For these reasons, bicycles are a common and practical choice.

× I always wanted a bike but unfortunately my parents cannot afford buying me one instead of I have many toys but definitely not a bike unfortunately.

✓ I always wanted a bike, but unfortunately my parents could not afford to buy me one. I had many toys, but definitely not a bike.

Errors: incorrect modal verb tense and verb patterns. 'Cannot afford buying me one' is incorrect: 'afford' is followed by the infinitive with to ('afford to buy'), and because the context is past, the modal should be past ('could not' instead of 'cannot'). The second clause 'instead of I have many toys' is ungrammatical and mixes ideas; use a separate past-tense sentence: 'I had many toys, but definitely not a bike.' Suggestion: use 'could not afford to buy' for past inability and separate ideas into clear sentences.

× Definitely bikes are very popular because of having a car is not that easy and we have a lot of traffic jams.

✓ Definitely, bikes are very popular because owning a car is not easy and we have a lot of traffic jams.

Errors: awkward noun phrase 'because of having a car is not that easy' uses incorrect structure. Replace with a gerund phrase 'owning a car' to express possession in a general present-tense statement. Also add a comma after 'Definitely' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'owning a car' or 'it is not easy to have a car' for smoother expression.

× Moreover, if you bike you can easily practice doing sports as a physical activity that is good for your health.

✓ Moreover, if you ride a bike, you can easily get exercise, which is good for your health.

Errors: 'if you bike' is nonstandard; English uses 'ride a bike'. 'Practice doing sports' is awkward—use 'get exercise' or 'do sports'. 'As a physical activity that is good for your health' is wordy; use a relative clause 'which is good for your health.' Suggestion: use 'ride a bike' and concise phrasing like 'get exercise' or 'do physical activity.'

× So bikes are very popular and they are cheap compared to other form of transportation.

✓ So bikes are very popular and they are cheap compared to other forms of transportation.

Errors: 'other form of transportation' uses singular 'form' with 'other' and 'transportation' general noun—should be plural 'forms' to match meaning. Suggestion: use 'other forms of transportation' or 'other modes of transportation.'