Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar, organize into a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words (for example, because and so) and correct verb forms (e.g., “made me feel”). Add a specific detail (brand, age, or a memorable moment) to strengthen content.

Exemplo: Yes. I had a bright red bike when I was about eight. It was a lightweight model with a simple gear system, which made uphill rides much easier, so I enjoyed cycling to school. My classmates often admired its flashy graphics, and I remember entering a small neighborhood race with it once.

Sugestão: Clarify your ideas and correct incorrect word choices (e.g., “raided by” is wrong). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, therefore). Provide concrete examples (commuting, delivery riders, leisure) and improve vocabulary (commonly used, popular for commuting).

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For one thing, many people use them for daily commuting—delivery riders and local workers often rely on bicycles because they are cheap and easy to park. Also, children and adults cycle for exercise and leisure, so bikes are a common sight in parks and busy streets.

× I had one red colour bike when I was a child and it was really functional with lot of graphics and very convenient because it has a gear system which always make me like feel like riding it all the time.

✓ I had a red-colored bike when I was a child; it was very functional with lots of graphics and was very convenient because it had a gear system that always made me feel like riding it all the time.

Errors: incorrect adjective form 'red colour' (should be 'red-colored' or 'red'), missing article before 'lot' and wrong form 'lot of' should be 'lots of', tense inconsistency (mixing past 'had' with present 'has' and present 'make' instead of past 'made'), and unnecessary filler 'like'. Suggestions: Use consistent past tense when talking about childhood (use 'had', 'was', 'had', 'made'). Use correct adjective forms ('red-colored' or 'red'), include the article 'a' before countable nouns, use 'lots of' for plural noncountable expressions, and remove filler words like 'like'.

× And most importantly when I used to carry it in my school, my friends really give me a passionate look for it.

✓ And most importantly, when I used to carry it to school, my friends would give me admiring looks.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'give' should agree with past habitual 'used to' or 'would give'; incorrect preposition 'in my school' should be 'to school'; 'passionate look for it' is unnatural—use 'admiring looks'. Suggestions: For past habitual actions use 'used to' with base verb or 'would' plus base verb; use correct prepositions for movement ('to school'); choose natural collocations ('admiring looks' instead of 'passionate look for it').

× Yes, in my country bikes are quite popular because it has been raided by police, ambulance drivers and local workers as well.

✓ Yes, in my country bikes are quite popular because they are widely used by police, ambulance drivers, and local workers.

Errors: mismatch between subject 'bikes' (plural) and 'it has been' (singular and passive awkwardness); incorrect use of 'raided' which means attacked; unclear meaning. Suggestions: Ensure subject-verb agreement ('bikes' -> 'they are'), use correct verbs ('used by' rather than 'raided by'), and express the intended meaning clearly ('widely used by police, ambulance drivers, and local workers').

× And most importantly the kids always use their bike here and there.

✓ And most importantly, children often ride their bikes everywhere.

Errors: 'kids' acceptable but 'children' preferred in formal responses; 'use their bike' has singular 'bike' with plural possessive—should be 'their bikes' or rephrase to 'ride their bikes'; 'here and there' is informal and vague—use 'everywhere' or 'around'. Suggestions: Match plural pronouns and nouns ('their bikes'), use precise adverbs ('everywhere'), and prefer 'ride' for bicycles.

× So we have seen there is a quiet fitness, people also use it.

✓ So we can see that biking contributes to some fitness; people also use bicycles for exercise.

Errors: 'quiet fitness' is incorrect word choice ('quiet' vs 'quite') and ungrammatical structure; vague pronoun 'it' unclear. Suggestions: Use correct adverb 'quite' if intended ('quite good for fitness') or rephrase to express the idea clearly ('biking contributes to fitness'), avoid vague pronouns by naming the activity or object ('bicycles' or 'biking'), and ensure quantifiers and adjectives match the meaning.