Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and confident: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers like “uh,” and add one specific supporting detail to enrich the answer (but keep it under five sentences). Use a linking phrase if adding another detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was three years old and learned to ride in my grandparents’ yard. Later, I used it to visit friends and run small errands, which helped me become more independent.

Sugestão: Be specific and clearer in your opinion: give a direct topic sentence stating whether bikes are popular, then provide one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid vague phrases like “it should be that evolved” and replace with concrete suggestions. Use linking words (for example, however, because) to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, most people prefer cars because of long distances and limited cycling paths; however, I’ve seen abroad that cycling is common because it’s convenient and relaxing, so we could improve bike lanes to encourage more riders.

× I think it is not that popular, but I see people abroad enjoying the bike rides and it is kind of soothing and I think it should be that evolved.

✓ I don't think bikes are that popular here, but I see people abroad enjoying bike rides; it is kind of soothing, and I think they should become more common.

Multiple present-tense and related issues: 'I think it is not that popular' is awkward for general statement about bikes—use 'I don't think bikes are that popular here' (present simple negative and plural noun). 'I see people abroad enjoying the bike rides' should be 'enjoying bike rides' (no definite article for general activity). 'It is kind of soothing' is acceptable but clearer with punctuation. 'I think it should be that evolved' is ungrammatical and unclear; corrected to 'I think they should become more common' to express the intended idea in present/future sense. Suggestions: use present simple for general facts/opinions, avoid unnecessary articles with general activities, and use clear verbs like 'become' or 'become more common' instead of 'evolved'.