Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve fluency and clarity by removing hesitations and repetition, and follow a clear structure: give a direct topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details (who gave it, why, and a short memory). Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly. Keep the answer to fewer than five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. I had a bicycle as a child; my father gave it to me as a present. Because I wanted to play with children in my neighbourhood, I cried until he bought it for me, and I remember riding it every afternoon with my friends.

Sugestão: Focus on clear grammar and precise vocabulary. Start with a direct opinion sentence, then add two specific reasons with linking words (for example, "because" and "also"). Correct common mistakes: say "people ride bikes" not "write it", and avoid repeating words. Limit to three sentences maximum.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. Also, many people prefer bikes for daily commuting to avoid traffic. In addition, adults who ride on roads usually need a licence, so safety regulations are becoming more common.

× Uh, yes, uh, I had a bicycle when I was, uh, when I was a child that, that, that, that was gifted by my, uh, father when I cried a lot and because I have to, because I had to play with my, uh, uh, locality, uh, with my locality friend, uh, and, and they enjoy a lot in their.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child; it was a gift from my father because I cried a lot and needed something to play with my local friends, and they enjoyed it a lot.

The original sentence is disfluent and contains repeated fillers and fragments, causing sentence structure errors (type 26). Remove filler words, reduce repetition, and combine clauses into a clear compound sentence. Use 'it was a gift from my father' instead of 'that was gifted by my father' for a natural active structure, change 'have to/had to' to 'needed' to match past context, and use 'local friends' and 'enjoyed it a lot' to make the meaning clear. Suggestion: practice forming concise past-tense sentences and avoid fillers.

× ...because, uh, because it is affordable, uh, affordable and convenient to move one place to another.

✓ ...because it is affordable and convenient to move from one place to another.

The phrase 'move one place to another' is missing the preposition 'from' which is required in the idiom 'from one place to another' (type 11). Use 'from' to indicate the starting point; this creates a correct prepositional phrase.

× And most of the people, uh, most of the people uh, used to write it who is above uh, 18 as they, they got a license to try.

✓ Most people over 18 are allowed to ride them because they have a license.

The original sentence has multiple agreement and word-choice issues (type 27). 'Most of the people' can be simplified to 'Most people'; 'used to write it' is incorrect verb choice — 'ride them' (bicycles) is correct. 'Who is above 18' should be 'over 18' and must agree in number with 'people' so use 'are'. Use 'allowed to ride' or 'can ride' instead of 'used to'. 'They have a license' matches plural subject. Suggestion: identify the subject (people) and ensure verbs and pronouns agree in number; choose verbs appropriate for the action (ride, allowed, can).