Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid unnecessary repetition (e.g., "our bike" and "just one bike" repeated). Also watch for tense accuracy and natural phrasing ("I used to borrow her bike" is more natural).

Exemplo: No, I didn't have my own bike. Instead, I used to borrow my neighbor Sarah's bike, and we often rode it together to the park and around the neighborhood, which was a lot of fun.

Sugestão: Start with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., 'potholes' or 'bad roads', 'many children do not have bikes', 'children love them when they see one'). Keep sentences simple and accurate.

Exemplo: I don't think bikes are very popular in Turkey. One reason is that many roads have potholes and are unsafe for cycling, and as a result, many children don't own bikes even though they enjoy riding when they get the chance.

× We were going everywhere together with just one bike, and it was so fun playing with that one.

✓ We went everywhere together on just one bike, and it was so fun to play with it.

The progressive past 'were going' suggests ongoing action but here a simple past is more natural for repeated past events. 'Going everywhere together on a bike' uses 'on' as correct preposition for vehicles. 'Playing with that one' is awkward: use the infinitive 'to play' or 'playing with it' — the infinitive fits better with 'it was so fun.' Use 'it' instead of 'that one' for natural reference.

× I don't think so because there are so many dents in our roads in Turkey.

✓ I don't think so because there are so many potholes in the roads in Turkey.

'Dents' is not the usual word for road damage; 'potholes' is correct. Also 'in our roads in Turkey' is redundant; use 'in the roads in Turkey' or simply 'on the roads in Turkey.' 'So many' is acceptable but pair it with the correct noun.

× I'm from Turkey, there is no that one that's much child who has a bike, even though the child's love when they see one bike.

✓ I'm from Turkey; not many children have bikes, although children love them when they see one.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Use a semicolon or separate sentences: 'I'm from Turkey; not many children have bikes.' 'That one that's much child' is incorrect structure; replace with 'not many children.' 'The child's love when they see one bike' mixes possessive and singular/plural wrongly; use 'children love them when they see one' to match plural reference. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct pronoun reference.