Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, correct mistakes (e.g., 'bag' → 'bike'), avoid unnecessary fillers, and give one or two specific supporting details. Keep it within 3–4 short sentences and use simple linking words for clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was about seven, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend. It helped me learn balance and made spending time outdoors more fun.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence, avoid vague phrases and fillers, and add specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, so, therefore) and more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'practical' → 'cost-effective' or 'eco-friendly'). Limit to 2–4 concise sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap to maintain and good for short trips. For example, many students and commuters use bicycles to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× Umm yes of course I have.

✓ Umm yes of course I had.

The question asked about possession in the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Have' is present tense; use 'had' to match the past context. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when the question refers to past time (e.g., 'I had a bike').

× I had a bag when I was a child and I really like to ride a bike.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child and I really liked to ride it.

There are multiple issues: the student wrote 'I had a bag' which is likely a wrong noun choice; assuming they meant 'bike', change to 'bike'. Also the clause refers to past habitual action ('when I was a child'), so verbs should be past tense: 'liked' not 'like'. Pronoun reference: replace 'a bike' with 'it' to avoid repetition. Suggestions: keep noun consistent with context and match verb tense to past time; use pronouns to avoid repetition (e.g., 'I had a bike ... I really liked to ride it').

× Absolutely, because it is very practical and very convenient for everyone.

✓ Absolutely, because bikes are very practical and convenient for everyone.

The pronoun 'it' is vague here; better to use the plural noun 'bikes' to match the general statement 'Do you think bikes are popular...'. Also maintain plural agreement: 'are' with 'bikes'. Suggestion: refer back to the subject with the appropriate noun or plural pronoun and ensure subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'bikes are').

× So, umm, I think many people all like it.

✓ So, umm, I think many people like them.

The phrase 'many people all like it' is awkward: 'it' does not agree in number with 'many people' and 'all' is unnecessary. Use 'them' to refer to 'bikes' plural, or rephrase 'many people like bikes.' Suggestion: match pronoun number to the noun ('bikes' -> 'them') or repeat the noun ('many people like bikes').